Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Mrf70 on Thu, 06/21/2018 - 08:31

By and large, it's established beyond the doubt that always young people should be upbringing on account of rules. An old Persian author states that " youngsters are the cornerstone of each society"; hence, always the rules will enhance them to be organized in their life. It is noticeable to be mentioned is that the rules have been altered during the time but it is not easy to consider them as strict rules in compaire to the past rules. After regarding the differrent factors in to consideration, I firmly assert that nowadays the rules not only are more kindnly but also have been organized. In the following, I will elaborate more details to explain my point of view in this con text.

The first and the most exquisite point need to be mentioned is that youngsters are free to be alone or live in own home. In the past, a plethora of people are of the conviction that youngsyers never leave home since get marrige, they believes that youngsters should be controled with their families. In contrast, todays, the young people are free to live in own home or even have personal notion. As far as I am concern, in the past,the rules which limited the youngsters were more than now,by way of example, in the past, the majority of people are of the opinion that young people never travel alone but nowadays, the young people can easily travel and enjoying of their life.

There is another factor that deserves some words is that rules of society are more acceptable for young people because let them to countinueing their education and be knowledgeable which have lots of merit for their community. In contrast, in the past, youngsters specially girls never have allow to study, they always had force to work and marry. According to the survey has been conducted by Tehran university demonstrated that due to the comfortable rules in the scociety, the youngsters are more happy, but in the past strict rules dramatically reduce the motivation of the youngsters and they also never inerested to have best future due to they did not have impetus.

To put it all in nutshell, by considering all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly disagree with this idea. In my point of view, if the society establish the best rules for young people, their motivation and ability will flourish and we will have best society. It is noticeable to be mentioned again that youngsters will build our society more better, so, they need to be consider very deep.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'believe'
Suggestion: believe
...ever leave home since get marrige, they believes that youngsters should be controled wit...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ion. As far as I am concern, in the past,the rules which limited the youngsters were...
^^^^
Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , by
...imited the youngsters were more than now,by way of example, in the past, the majori...
^^^
Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'have' and 'allow'.
Suggestion: have never allow
...in the past, youngsters specially girls never have allow to study, they always had force to work...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'allowed'.
Suggestion: allowed
..., youngsters specially girls never have allow to study, they always had force to work...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'studying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: studying
...gsters specially girls never have allow to study, they always had force to work and marr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 623, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the best'.
Suggestion: have the best
...gsters and they also never inerested to have best future due to they did not have impetus...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 243, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the best'.
Suggestion: have the best
...n and ability will flourish and we will have best society. It is noticeable to be mention...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... that youngsters will build our society more better, so, they need to be consider very deep...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, regarding, so, in contrast, by and large

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79245283019 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62715100295 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464622641509 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3457131128 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.466666667 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2666666667 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118676317065 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450059876004 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290046381714 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807761138984 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00799935542673 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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