Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Societies are made by young people. Our young people are the future and pillar of our society. Considering the rule of society, it arouses different ideas among different people, Some may frown upon it, while others might nodes their heads, with a whole-hearted smile on their face. As far as I am considered I agree with this statement that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict, there are myriad reasons for this approach but I would explore only a few primary ones over here.
First of all, as we live in an aura of technology so most of the people did not live about the use of technology like mobile phone and laptop. Although, we all know that we cannot live without these gadgets because we need them at any step like we use GPS on the phone. I want to explain it with a compelling example of my self, When I was in Truman high school, my grandfather wants that I took him to my aunt place and when I enter the address in my mobile, he got annoyed and instructed me to go on my own. I didnot know about the route but as per his instruction i switched it off and eventually, we lost our path and we went to 3 hours drive away from my place which bring us so much trouble as my grandfather is diabetic and he was hypoglycemic. Unfortunately, i didnot have something to eat, so i called my brother and he came to pick us up from that day my grandfather also realizes that mobile is not a bad thing as our society had a concept about it.
There is another reason which further solidifies the dominace of my opinon. I was reading an article in Wall street journel in which they mentioned about the thing how strict rules caused destruction for our society, because most of the young people got rebellious and evently became the source of trouble for our society. I want to explain it by my cousion example, he was a great and exceptional students in studies but when he grows up, my aunt put so much restrictions on him that he is not allowed to go even at his friends place which brings so much stess level in his life that he tried to make a plan and then he run away from the home and make friends who had bad society and then he became drug addict, so just a little bit of rule destroyed his whole life. So by this means we have to set rule but not that which are hard to follow
I want to conclude my essay with the statement that live and let others live too.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 378, Rule ID: WANT_THAT_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'wants me to'?
Suggestion: wants me to
...s in Truman high school, my grandfather wants that I took him to my aunt place and when I en...
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Line 2, column 567, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ut the route but as per his instruction i switched it off and eventually, we lost...
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Line 2, column 802, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ely, i didnot have something to eat, so i called my brother and he came to pick u...
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Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...es but when he grows up, my aunt put so much restrictions on him that he is not allo...
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Line 3, column 723, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...d then he became drug addict, so just a little bit of rule destroyed his whole life. So by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23376623377 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37386588072 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504329004329 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.835595799 48.9658058833 210% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 150.461538462 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5384615385 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16290790791 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734007182048 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092038098333 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122446844199 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968448731046 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.85 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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