Do you agree or disagree？ It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than
doing physical exercise. Explain your answer with examples and specific reasons.
In the modern era, becoming calm has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, people have always sought ways to enhance calm in their life. Some people may hold the view that reading a book or seeing a film is the best ways for becoming relax. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that doing some sports is better than reading a book or seeing a film for reducing stress. I content that doing a regular exercise can help people to become relaxed. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that humans become happy when they doing some sport. To elaborate on my point, when people doing some sport, their body release of a great amount of dopamine in their mind. Dopamine is an especial hormone that is responsible for creating a sense of satisfaction and happiness in mind. Indeed, people become happy and reduce their anxiety. Moreover, doing sport would increase the amount of oxygen in the human lungs that help to reduce negative energy in their body so that they can become happy and relax. Some scientist believes that a kind of food that people consume has a direct connection with the human mood. If people consume organic and healthy food, they must become happier than other people who consume unhealthy food. In other words, when people doing some sports, they would try to eat healthy food, and it helps them to reduce their stress and become a happier person. I think that sport has a long effect on the human body, but reading a book or seeing a movie only has a temporary effect on human. For example, when people watching a film for 2 hours, they only would reduce their stress in 2 hours, and after a film, they return to their previous situation.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that doing sports can improve human connection. To shed more light on this matter, when individuals doing sports especially a group sport, they can connect to other people. In this situation, they have a chance to speak with others and find suitable friends. In most situations, when people become anxious or have stress, they want to speak with others and reduce their upsets. In a sports group, people would be able to speak with others and solve the problem that causes their negative situations. Furthermore, when people participated in a group sport, they must connect to their teammate as well as they can. So, they must concentrate and focus on their team so that they cannot think about a problem that makes them anxious. As a result, individual become relax.
All in all, considering the aforementioned reason leads us to the conclusion that doing some sports would increase human anxiety and they become relax. I believe that by doing regular sports not only human can make a permanent happier sense but also can improve social interaction that help them to become relaxed.
- TPO 20 80
- In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives 73
- Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money to do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage), while other people believe that parents should not pay their children to do these tasks. 63
- TPO 27 71
- TPO 31 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 15, column 428, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ak with others and reduce their upsets. In a sports group, people would be able to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, i think, kind of, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83921568627 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.370185989 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435294117647 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.693868741 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9230769231 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34615384615 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0877878003029 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329147676298 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0291477537992 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664352302946 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254601769101 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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