Do you agree or disagree?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent’s jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent’s job.
Even though many sociologists and most of the people argue as if it is a general truth that for more successful and progress in future, children should shoos their parent’s jobs and occupations, I firmly recommend that children are growing up in modern world and new technologies which this ways are improving and enhancing every year with high funds, and actually childhood should select their jobs freely by their acknowledges and wisdoms. And believe it or not, recent socials and communities demand and require more fresh and updated people relevant to novel matters. I will elaborate my idea with significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the meaningful reasons coming to my mind at first is that young people should pursue their objectives and goals with the aim of requirements of communities and government due to earn more money than their parents. As a matter of fact, we are witness of changing devices and vehicles by innovative techniques that need to persons with full skills and experiences. Parents have more old and demoded jobs connected with past people by lower incomes and money. If young children choose similar acts of their parent, they will accept in more worthless social opportunities beyond doubt. As an example, when a father is worker and toil of his job’s situation and giving less money, his children not only select jobs that ate similar to father’s job, but also try to gain high payments and salary with conditions and employments.
Another my remarkable reason is that youth people have to be freedom and independence. Actually, they are are growing up and be older, then need be freely and choose their future without influence of parent’s opinions. I can be guess that children who follow their parent’s jobs, they can’t be creative and inventive thus, this has harmful effective on their individual characteristics. You can see children who select different jobs than their adulthoods, they are more self-confidence and believing oneself. Recent studies of psychologists conducted to compare people the most famous and major managers who are self-sufficient and free in social activities with the persons that dependent on others experiences like their parents. The result of this surveys have shown the fact that successful and renowned people had more feely selects in their life of course in selective of jobs.
As a result, one the basic of points mentioned above, I strongly disagree with this statement that “It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent’s jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent’s job” young people nowadays have to be more openly in their selecting and don’t continue their parent’s ways and methods. Wealthy and important persons select more different job of the past that old people worked at there, because of complicated instruments and tools.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'shoo'
Suggestion: shoo
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...modern world and new technologies which this ways are improving and enhancing every ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, of course, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 13.8261648746 253% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2475.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2436440678 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88580087732 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523305084746 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.859412151 48.9658058833 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 154.6875 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6875 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488905262406 0.236089414692 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148576613627 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168139157022 0.0737576698707 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.350787157495 0.150856017488 233% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16857208608 0.0645574589148 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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