I do not think seeing violence in video games and movies make people behave violently. I think this for couple of reasons
first among those is people take games and movies as entertainment, secondly sometimes tricks learned from these those could
be used to save lives, if coincendently same trageddy happend in real life. At last I would say those who behave violently
does not mean they watch violent movies or play violent games and learn.
First and formost, people watch movies and play video games for the save of entertainment. I am a big fan of video games
I love playing many with my friends. We plan event on weekend thats how everyone come to one's place and we all have fun
together playing game. On winter days these two things watching movies and playing video games are our group activities.
Some people in our group love watching thriller and violent movies they like and those who do not like still wtch it with group.
But we never had performed any violent act watching those movie. So I do not think watching/playing violent movies/games makes us behave similar.
Next thing I would like to point out is that tricks learned from violent games/movies can be used in positive way to save lives.
I must say we see lots of situations strategy and tricks in violent movies/games that in real life we had hardly thought about those.
Sometime lessons learned from those virtual stories can be life saver if you came across similar situations in real life.
One of my friend had saved many lives in his office when his office had cought fire and he had seen such thing in one of movie we saw
together and he used same trick from movie to save lives.
Moreover, those who behave violently does not necessarily mean they watch/play violent movie/game. No all sereal killer would be watching or playing violent movie/game. They do it for various reasons and I do not think watching and playing makes them become serial killer.
So it is not appropriate to say that watching and playing violent thing indulge one in behaving violently in real life.
To sum up, with all above reasons discussed I do not think watching/playing violent movies/games promote violent behaviour.
Since not all serial killer watch vidoel movies neither they al play violent games and we see many others stories behind them to become
what they are now.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'i think', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219907407407 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.224537037037 0.158761421928 141% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0902777777778 0.0866891130778 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0625 0.046263068375 135% => OK
Pronouns: 0.087962962963 0.0685040099705 128% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.101851851852 0.118717715034 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0578703703704 0.0351676179071 165% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50288606662 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0185185185185 0.0309702414327 60% => OK
Particles: 0.00462962962963 0.00188951952338 245% => OK
Determiners: 0.0439814814815 0.0887237588012 50% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0162037037037 0.0209618222197 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0138888888889 0.0139019557991 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2356.0 2387.08602151 99% => OK
No of words: 407.0 408.028673835 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7886977887 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.316953316953 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.206388206388 0.251872472559 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.113022113022 0.174417080927 65% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0638820638821 0.112833075102 57% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50288606662 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469287469287 0.524397521467 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.6700080681 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.35 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2345728728 48.84282405 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.8 120.699889404 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.35 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.5376344086 397% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 40.9888206388 45.7405998639 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.01234567901 1.45489161554 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395268034033 0.300154397459 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123500465211 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0576878473915 0.0752933317313 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.777860344547 0.497263757937 156% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.223786308405 0.151897553556 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152014252831 0.114077575197 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135521751223 0.0781384742642 173% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.117152727058 0.336927656856 35% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0610125390829 0.067059652881 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152311718481 0.210909579961 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105528573554 0.0618886996521 171% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.4623655914 284% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.