educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past, because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, social networking websites.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt that education plays a pivotal role in the lives of young people. I believe that these days educating children is easier that it was in the past. In what follows, I will aptly elaborate on my perspective.
The first point to be mentioned is that the advantages of developed technology outweigh its disadvantages. Technology provide the students with the opportunity to make use of in a right way. Pupiles are able to read e-books and it enables them to have all of their books in one portable and light e-book reader. Also, the teachers can search for the animations of their lesson to help them to perceive the concept of the book thoroughly and easily. My sister's experience is a compelling example of this. Her teacher educate them with the mini laptops which the school have provided for them. Consequently, not only they are not required to take heavy suitcases to their classes , but also they watch the video of different subjects at the class and enjoy the taste of learning deeply.
Another equally important reason is that the technology have brought about the virtual education for those who cannot attend classes such as adults, employees,and failed students. Nowadays we live in a hectic life which makes it so important to make the best of our time. Since some illitrated women have some children, they do not take the chance to go to the school because they do not have enough time. Hence, virtual education is the most efficient way of success for them. In addition, the some of the companies' emploees must work in their week-days and they are off at the weekends. So, this technology assists them to become a high-educated person in the society. Had thess technologies not have existed, those people couldn't learn their favorite major.
In conclusion, I contend that technology ease the education because children utilize it to improve thei noledge and because some people can educate by virtual education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87724550898 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6451702816 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583832335329 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2088425401 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136650012598 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424301051319 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519639278442 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0973293818607 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405992160678 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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