It is hard to deny that these relationships between the various members of the extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) seem to be fading in today's world, which leads impressionable people to generate the idea that extended family is less important than it was in the old days. However, such a statement suffers from logical and factual fallacies, and it should be examined meticulously. As far as a sense of belonging, companionship, and stability are concerned, I firmly hold that the importance of extended family is still unneglectable.
First and foremost, an extended family provides its members with a strong sense of belonging, as it can promote building and maintaining the family bonds. Meanwhile, families who are a part of extended families experience emotional bonding as long as they live in the same place. Not to mention that people living further apart might not achieve this bonding while living with an extended family encourages you to spend more time with them and develop a strong family bond with all the family members. Having an extended family around gives children comfort and company and make them know where they belong, so they do not feel alone even if their parents are not with them.
Furthermore, the fact that having an extended family under the same roof means all the family members can get time to spend with their loved ones indicates one benefit that extended family provides is companionship. Take the case of me, whose family lives in northwest China, and when I moved to the southeast, I did not realize just how much I missed the benefits of the family society I gave up. I had my own family there, and it was when I moved back to the northwest that I realized what I had given up. Had it not been for leaving my hometown to leave alone and being lonely there, I would never place a high value on good extended family relationships.
Nevertheless, a voice arises that these fading relationships between the various extended family members result from choices that societies make in our changing world - in other words, the extended family is no longer important nowadays. Ironically, the decline of extended family does not represent the decline of its importance, so long as extended family support is still the most generous help. Having an extended family saves childcare support and encourages children to spend some quality time with their grandparents. Another support from living with an extended family is that it reduces the family's financial strain as it is a more affordable option. Therefore, since the extended family supports its members so much, no one can deny its high importance as ever.
In a nutshell, I maintain that the extended family still plays an important role in modern society as it was. Admittedly, as my favorite quote from James Madison goes, as long as the reason of man continues fallible, different opinions will be formed, and some people may oppose me. However, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
- In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money at young age 73
- Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
- In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money at young age 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95427435388 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68378387602 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489065606362 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 804.6 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.3155845672 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.157894737 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4736842105 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263519708797 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101627468211 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650400872738 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166949679061 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535894562861 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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