In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay
Living long and health played a vital role in each society and every era. People looked for the source of immorality. Even today people look for long life span. Some people claim that they have longer than their anchestor. However, other believe that individuals are not living longer now. From my vantage point, I am with the latter group and the lines which above will shen on light my view point.
First of all, the population of the world has skyrocketed compared the last centuries. This increase affect the quality of people's life. The big cities has become dangerous places. Individuals exposed highly radiation everyday. Everyday new people suffer from illnesses which stem from cancer. The less people used to die from cancer because there are not any machines which product radiation. Moreover, not only people affect but also plants. People have to consume unnatural plant. They kills us.
Secondly, people used to work longer than the dawn of industrial revelation. They used to work only four maybe five hours. They spend time with families or neighbor another hours. Today, we have to work nine hours in a day. It increase stress and heart attack risk. Furthermore, according to the a recent research which conducted in MIT University, people the mental illness has skyrocketed compared to last century.
Finally, taking all aforementioned reasons into the account, one cannot deny the fact that we have short lifespan. Even some people live long they have less quality life style.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'affects'.
Suggestion: affects
...pared the last centuries. This increase affect the quality of peoples life. The big ci...
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Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
...quality of peoples life. The big cities has become dangerous places. Individuals ex...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...s. Individuals exposed highly radiation everyday. Everyday new people suffer from illnes...
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Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...m illnesses which stem from cancer. The less people used to die from cancer because ...
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Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'kill'
Suggestion: kill
...e have to consume unnatural plant. They kills us. Secondly, people used to work lo...
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Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increases'?
Suggestion: increases
...we have to work nine hours in a day. It increase stress and heart attack risk. Furthermo...
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Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
... attack risk. Furthermore, according to the a recent research which conducted in MIT ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, even so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1258.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 247.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09311740891 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35555173442 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647773279352 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 20.1344086022 50% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8822515936 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 54.6956521739 100.406767564 54% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.7391304348 20.6045352989 52% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169219006039 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479240591835 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477550692906 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099406241867 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021103362402 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.33 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.06 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.0537634409 60% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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