Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
I disagree with that governments should spend more money on the arts than on athletics due to several reasons as following.
Firstly, the investment on athletics can help them achieve a better grade in international competition, representing a honor of a country. If government put more money on hiring famous coaches and building more sports facilities, the athletics will make a difference. For example, in China, the president announced that sports can help citizens healthy and Chinese government invested lots of money on sports such as ping pang. Before the investment, although we are good at playing small balls because of our physical advantages, we did not achieve any grades in any global competition. After our government emphasis on the development of sports, our ping pang team got champion in Olympic within a few years. Compared with the investment on arts, money spent on the athletics can bring much more to a country. Not only the great grades in competition, it can also help improve the relationship between China and the United States because of the famous historical events, called Ping Pang Diplomacy. At that time, communication on sports did bring us closely when our government want to build relationships with other countries.
Secondly, it will be easier for the government to invest on athletics than on the arts. Because there are hundreds forms of arts, it is hard for the government to develop each form equally, leading to some negative voices from other areas of arts if the investment is unequal. For example, if you put more money on concerts, artists in painting will ask for more money on their area. Therefore, the division of money can become a trouble for the government. However, for sports, the government can build some sports phystlities used by various kinds of sports. Cite gym as an example. Athletics in running and jumping can both use the same gym to practice. The gym can be used several times by different athletics. However, for a place where hold concerts, it cannot be used for exhibiting paintings.
Lastly, the investment on athletics can be used by other people and can be leveraged for further usage. If the government build a gym mainly for professional practice, other citizens can use it when the team does not use the gym, benefiting other people and saving money for the government. Besides, it will encourage citizens to play more sports to keep fit.
In conclusion, there are some benefits if the government spend more money on athletics than arts. Not only it can increase the reputation of the government, but also improve the health level of all citizens. Hence, it helps form healthy atmosphere of a country.
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- Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00223214286 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79297984379 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473214285714 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9718698362 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.375 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210286016353 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725414321497 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904514528371 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166286976059 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100116372551 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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