Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break.
a. Students must take a course which has no direct connection to their major (for example, students majoring in engineering take a course in fine arts or social sciences)
b. Students must volunteer to work on a project in their university’s city or hometown to improve some aspect of life in the city or hometown. For example, a student can work with primary school children who need help with their homework.
Which one do you prefer? Present reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is an old proverb that says: "any individual has to seize the opportunity," it means that, the opportunities are just like the blazing stars; Whenever a person sees a blazing star, begins to wish so if the opportunities be assumed as a blazing star which is exactly next to a person, he/she has to catch it. In my opinion, being volunteer at the university in order to work on a project weather in the university's city or any student's hometown is a suitable opportunity for both the students and the society because of the reasons which are followed later.
First, Working on a project is really quite beneficial to students. Wherever the project is but university—or everywhere the members are not necessarily at the same age range of the very person—can provide a good experience for the any individual because it is a chance for a person to evaluate him/herself to understand that if he/she is capable to overcome the problems, whatever they are. For example, because time tends to be more sensitive when working out of the university than in the university, they will learn how to manage their time as well as do the assigned task in an effective way. In addition, a person who is working out of a university is alleged to be more patient because he/she may face a wide variety of behaviors. Therefore, it is expected that the very person become more patient than the one who has no experience in working out of his/her university. Nevertheless, this person may lose a course which although may have no direct connection to his/her major, he/she loves that course. Besides, taking a course in another field of studying tend to inhibit a person of being unidimensional.
Second, it has some advantages for the society as well. Involving in the projects will effect on both educational and modest behavior aspects of a society. It is an open secret to everyone that neither education nor experience is enough for any stuff but if both education and experience come together, they will have a positive effect on any stuff. Thus, if an educated student helps an experienced man, this goal will be achieved. Furthermore, helping people in a modest manner by the students will have influences on the others; they will learn how to be reverent even if they are educated. In the other hand, students teach the people a life-turning lesson which hardly can be teach in any school or university. Nonetheless, taking a course in the other field has some beneficial too; it will help the students to study in the courses which finally effect on the society through improving the students' ability to understanding at least one point of view of the other people. However, working on a project tends to boost the whole society rather than just a single person.
As a conclusion, in my viewpoint, if the students become as a volunteer to work on a project in the city, the utility of this selection tend to be for both the students and the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, at least, for example, in addition, as well as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2450.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78515625 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87731044645 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455078125 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.3401718313 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.111111111 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7222222222 5.45110844103 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2062335542 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679425382969 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673676024033 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134983722788 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0101819057343 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 10.002688172 295% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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