Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 1: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

There is no shortage of debate about universities administration should receive equal financial support for sport,social activities and classes. This is essential dilemma for both students and managers of university. In my opinion,decision should be favor of equal financial assistance. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, a number of people consider that perios that we spend at university is best part of our life, because we learn something new, earn different perspectives against life and improve our knowledge, especially, as to our major. However, besides, enjoying with our friend, attending activities we also overcome hard exams. In particular, in final perios we spend amount of afford to pass exams with highest point that we can. When we get rid of classes, exams we want to rest and feel more relax. At this point activities, sports are best way. For example, when I was in university in first year I was struggling with my macro economicss exam. I could not figüre out relationship between interest rates and investments, but I know I had to pass that class because macro and micro classes are our basic courses. So I studied a lot throughout six weeks and I got +A,which is the best score that we can take from a class. I was very uncomfortable and tired. Then, I went to studio to play guitar with my friend four times a week and also attended a range of community. As a result, I felt better and better. I achieved my responsibilities and deserved it. To sum up, we are humankind we can not study seven days twenty-four hours. If we do not attend these kind of activities, it would be unbearable.
Secondly, all universities want to have great mission because they know that student care achievements of universities when they apply, especially, sport success.Hence, universities should review all details of their financial supporting. For example, when I was in highschool I was very interested in basketball. I almost was spending my whole time by playing this game with my friends. Being basketball player and play at NBA is my first dream. I am also aware of choosing good university is key point in this process. I researched a lot on internet, talked someone who is specialized at universities preferences and I decided to which university I would choose. It would be Hacettepe University whose basketball team is last champion on Turkish basketball league and it gives us amazing opportunity to improve our ability and skills at very modern places. I graduated from Hacettepe University last year and I am member of fenerbahce basketball team right know. I will able to play in Eurocup next year.
İn conclusion, I strongly belive that universities absolutely receive same financial help for activities and classes. Because no one want to take a education at boring campus and graduate without any ability and skill. Furthermore, students are likely to participate a university that care their future career

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for example, i feel, in particular, kind of, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98207171315 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02724162204 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545816733068 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.9767469377 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3666666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7333333333 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36666666667 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178414893742 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448912492329 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513388262611 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124855282349 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473463579912 0.0645574589148 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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