it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job- TPO 26
Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly common for children to have their own job which is completely different from that of their parents because they can experience independence. Nevertheless, it seems to me that having the same job as the parents' profession is of more benefit in various ways. In the following essay, I will vindicate my stance through two noticeable reasons.
To begin with, when children choose to have a similar job with their parents', their family will support them in every aspect of the job, helping them easily overcome the difficulties and challenges they face. In this way, they can have high levels of job-satisfaction, relieving the pressure and anxiety they feel. For instance, last day, I read an article in the field of stress-related disease. The author suggested that children who could not deal with the excessive workload or challenges of their jobs since they had no supportive person to guide them ended up having physical or mental diseases. In this regard, not only could they not experience success, but they also suffered from illnesses like a heart attack.
Another equally significant point is that having an occupation analogous to that of the parents can benefit children as they are familiar with this job due to the fact that from the time when they were babies, their parents were busy doing this type of work. In this regard, they can flourish in their job faster than their classmates who run their own business because they are well-experienced. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was twelve, my father worked in a book store. For the time when I was free, I helped him with the job, selling or advertising books. Had I been totally familiar with all the aspects of the job, I ran my book store. As a result of this, I had the most popular book store of all the other book stores in our city, avoiding the mistakes my father made during his career. Had I have my job different from my father's, I could have not been as successful as I am now.
All in all, it is more beneficial for children to continue their parents' jobs. This is because their parents can give them complete support in difficulties. Furthermore, the more accustomed they are with their vocation, the more chance they can have to thrive in their job. This is why I recommend that parents encourage their children to have the same profession as them.
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- In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes rather than ton work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 70
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only 3 days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work 5 days a week for shorter hours TPO 30 70
- TPO 29 70
- Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities 78
- parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past-TPO 28 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...s to me that having the same job as the parents profession is of more benefit in variou...
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Line 5, column 830, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...my father made during his career. Had I have my job different from my fathers, I cou...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, well, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77644230769 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70037317817 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478365384615 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1917659797 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.35 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336706937009 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116705320336 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888444582065 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247863417137 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275289385452 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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