It is better for children to follow their parents' career instead of beginning a new job
There is no doubt that nowadays, choosing a job is one of the most crucial decisions in every individual's life. The ever-increasing prominence of this issue has engendered this question as to whether should children follow their paren's career or start a new job. Some people may cling to the idea that it is a wise idea for children to begin a career which differs from their parents, while I am of the opinion that it is more rational for individuals to pursue their parent's job. There are numerous rationals, two of which I will explore in what follows.
The first reason coming to mind is that by following their ancestors' carrier, individuals could elicit valuable points from their experiences to be more prosperous in their job. In the way of illustration, when a person initiates a new career, he has to learn every little thing on his own without any help. Therefore, it is more likely for this person to make a mistake in his job. On the contrary, when he follows his parent’s career, he could get lots of helpful information from them, and do his work in the best way. It is no secret that when an individual commences his career, while he is informed about every aspect of his work, he could be a more fruitful person than one who starts from zero without any knowledge and experience. My own experience is a compelling example of this reality. After college, I started my job in a primary school in our city as a teacher. I paniced at first because neither I had experience in teaching nor none of my family members. Thus, there was no one to advise me how to prepare for this career to have better efficiency. Also, parents of one of my colleagues who started her career at the same time were teachers. Accordingly, she came to school prepared and well-informed, while I even did not know what kind of dress I should wear for the first day. Undoubtedly, were my parent teacher as well, I would have begun my work more confidently like my colleague.
The second ground which deserves some words here is that when we follow our parent's work, we could take the advantages of their career. In other words, pursuing a family career could make us more well-known in our job and other people who related to our career would easily trust us. As a result, we could establish our work and be booming more quickly. For instance, my father is a well-known architect in our city. Consequently, my older sister, from an early age became interested in this field of study. As a result, she chose architecture as her major in university. After graduation, she began her career as an architect, and very rapidly she could take lots of projects thanks to name of my father. No one can deny the direct and indirect effects of being well-known in a career in successfulness in our work. This example demonstrates this reality that when we follow our parents' job, we have more chance to be victorious.
On the whole, based on the points mentioned above, we can safely conclude that it is more logical to pursue our parents work because in this way not only we can use their experience in our work but also we can take advantage of their name to be well-known from the beginning.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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There is no doubt that nowadays, choosin...
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...this issue has engendered this question as to whether should children follow their parens car...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, kind of, no doubt, as a result, in other words, on the contrary, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2619.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 569.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60281195079 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67216480134 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467486818981 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 830.7 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4818509063 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.730769231 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8846153846 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26422501392 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737094969169 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746609280689 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1802009568 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103009631789 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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