TPO42-Independent writing
There is no doubt that types of the tasks which workers do in their job has a crucial importance for them. A controversial question which arises here is where or not having different tasks to do during the workday can more satisfy workers. Some people believe that having different tasks to do is more complicated and would make the worker's duties harder, while I am of the opinion that having various task during the day is more exciting for them. There are numeros grounds, two of which I will explore in what follows.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that doing a repetitive task could decrease the efficiency of employees. In the way of illustration, we individuals have to do one task all the time, they do it with less accuracy and their efficiency would significantly decrease. Besides, it is more likely for workers to make mistake in their job. My own example is a comelling example of this. Back in college, I got a part-time job in coffee shop of college. My duty was only to take order form costomers. Every day, for three hours, I had to do the same job repitedly. Therefore, I made mistakes frequently due to the fact that my task became very boring for me and I did my work without any passion. Had I did various duties during the workday, it would have been more inspiring for me.
The second noteworthy point which deserves some words here is that doing different tasks during the day can be more interesting for employees. To be more clear, some tasks always are more intriging for workers. Accordingly, they do not end up to do a task which they do not like. Even though they have to do some task which is not exciting, they can do something interesting as well. For instance, my sister who is an architectur has several duties every day. At the beginig of the day she has to train some architecture students to be ready to work in their company. After that, she has to meet with her boss to informed him about the progress of their company. Also, she has to design some bulding plots for their costomers. To be honest, she do not like participating in meeting for giving the report of the projects, but training students or doing design outweight to these boring meeting and makes her to feel satisfaction about her work in this company.
On the whole, based on the points mentiones above, we can safely conclude that having different tasks during the day can substantially beneficial for employees because in this way their work not only is not boring but also their efficiency would increase.
- It is better for children to follow their parents' career instead of beginning a new job 73
- parent should get their children money for every high grade 73
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for every good grade 65
- TPO43-Integrated writing 76
- A high salary or an interested job 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
... did my work without any passion. Had I did various duties during the workday, it w...
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Line 5, column 746, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
... for their costomers. To be honest, she do not like participating in meeting for g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, no doubt, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59734513274 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56779312939 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471238938053 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4529347105 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.347826087 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.652173913 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34782608696 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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