It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
This is one of the controversial issues among people because it has important effects on people's life. I completely agree with this claim that it is better for people to extensive knowledge about various academic subjects. Here you can see my reasons.
First, it probably improves their chance of finding a job. All of the persons need a job to manage their lives, but by emerging an unsuitable economic condition around the world, finding a job becomes one of the people's significant difficulties. In this situation, people must spend their time for learning vital skills and enlarge their knowledge. This background helps them to become a knowledgeable person and increase their chance to land a great job.
Second, earning more money is another result of having knowledge about different science. Nowadays, the competition among people who have the same job for making more money increases. In this condition, having knowledge about some academic subject can assist them to overcome to other people. For example, most of the electric companies try to learn about computer science because they want to introduce their goods to all individuals around their country or the world. Their information about computer and internet advertising help them to improve their chance of selling more in comparison with other companies.
Third, becoming prosperous in education is another apparent reason. Nowadays, most of the renowned researchers and professors tend to discover and invent new things. For this goal, they spend most of their time for studying and obtaining new information about other science. These type of the professors or researchers prefer to accept of the students who either have information about other sciences or are interested in learning and extending their knowledge. So, if people who want to become successful in their education and find this chance to work with well- known people must focus to gain information about different sciences.
In conclusion, earning more money, increasing the people chance for finding a job, and become successful in education are the advantages of studying and learning several academic subjects . These benefits convince people that have a broadened knowledge has a lot of positive effects on their lives.
- Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. 83
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- It is better for children to choose jobs that is similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. 73
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- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. 60
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, third, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32681564246 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7276667198 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508379888268 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9313418981 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.368421053 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8421052632 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109210642557 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422468217617 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579870910038 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784322204956 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494706479876 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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