The world is your playground and the only constant is change. I believe that people should visit places that they have never been to. The exploring nature of human should never stop. I think if a person stays forever with the same persons their entire life their growth stagnants. Thus a person should go out and search and meet new people. I will present my point in the below paragraphs.
Firstly, I think that when a person moves out of his home town he starts to learn important or valuable life skills which cannot be acquired by staying at the same place. Furthermore, When a person leaves his or her home they understand the basic life lesson which can be only acquired through life struggles. Drawing from a personal experience i left my country at the age of 21, At that time i was naive. Intially, it was a difficult experience , I felt quite uncomfortable in the foriegn country, Soon i realised the importance of all small things which i took for granted in house. I missed my family so much. But as days passed by i started getting acquianted with the situation. I meet life long friends. Got to interact with some of best experts in the field of computer science. My career took off from their. In addition to this, I believe that everyone should pass through this intial phase of hardship in order to succeed.
Secondly, Further reason that i would put to support my viewpoint is when you leave your hometown in search of new opportunities you meet like minded people in the journey. You learn about various viewpoints or different perspective too. When i came to went to other country as immigrant i came across people who were facing similar problem. Those friends who stays with you in difficult times tends to stay with you forever. Morever, when you visit a place with a great system that provides you with opportunity you try to reach your full potential by watching others. I have seen poor people migrating to my town attending local schools and getting formal education. This people by getting proper guidance tend to become well known scientist, philosophers and researchers. To elaborate on this topic. I would cite a recent survey which states that more and more people transfer from rural areas to metro cities in search of jobs. This phenomenon is quite prevalent nowadays, thus i say that if you get better career growth elsewhere you should not think about having comfort in your hometown.
In the lights of above mentioned reasons, I believe that one should migrate out of his comfort zone or home town if they have a better opportunity as they will get many valuable life lessons on the path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as to, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7136659436 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49629417434 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542299349241 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3062500378 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4814814815 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0740740741 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180868590967 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396537500796 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04768215153 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108636097447 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203019400229 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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