It is more important to choose friends that can have fun with you than to choose friends that will help you when you need them.
By and large, the contemporary age is no strange to the notion of independence and its necessities in the modern era. At a specific age, each person must become independent from their parents. In this regard, as the patterns of living are changing, notably, in the recent years, some are on the belief that the children are more dependent on their families than they were in the past. Notwithstanding differences, in my view, the level of dependence is increasingly reducing in the recent years. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, nowadays, the children can be easily informed about the different elements of life in varied areas. as a matter of fact, as the technology evolves and creates more and more windows of opportunities, people are equipped with different conveniences through their life, such radio, satellite TV, cell phones, laptop, to name but a few. In this condition, the children dealing more with these conveniences, compared with adults, are exposed to a wider variety of programs and information broadcasted or published in these areas. increasingly exposed to such areas, the children tend to get their information through these, and as a result, they do not need their parents, making a decision, choosing the best place to eat, getting a tutor, to name but a few. On the other hand, lacking the social media and other equipment, such as TV and radio in the past, the main source of information and details about different problems they would face was the parents, so they refer to their parents to get informed about their issues.
Secondly, compared with the past, the youngsters spend more and more time with their friends, thereby reducing the amount of time they hang out with their parents. In fact, the young people, in this age and time, can be aware of different ceremonies and events they may have with their friends through social media, such as Whatsapp, Telegram and so on. In the past, nevertheless, due to lack of these types of equipment, people did not meet with their friends unless in school or in one route accidentally. In addition, the children can be exceedingly inspired by the friends, in comparison with the family members. An observation I have made recently is a good example of this. My little brother, named Mohammad, decided to wear the hip-hop clothes one year ago, while my parent advised him to wear the prevalent dress, which is more admirable. Inspired by his friends, he evaded accepting our parents’ advice. In contrast, I can recall that when I was nearly ten years old, I was required, by force, to wear the clothes which my father had bought for me.
All in all, although some people may disagree with my opinion, because of the increased level of information among young persons and increased amount of time they are spending with friends, they are more independent in this age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...erent elements of life in varied areas. as a matter of fact, as the technology evo...
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Line 3, column 541, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Increasingly
...roadcasted or published in these areas. increasingly exposed to such areas, the children ten...
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Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...in school or in one route accidentally. In addition, the children can be exceeding...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, in addition, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, by and large, in my view, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89717741935 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72125667123 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510080645161 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 4.94265232975 384% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.5571840481 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.842105263 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1052631579 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5789473684 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128522829142 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403150214968 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305737771445 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0721283975342 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379466064506 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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