Many companies provide important products or services but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty, such as a higher or a large fine, when they cause environmental damage. Other people think there are better ways to stop the companies from harming the environment. Which view do you agree with and why?
Many big-scale companies contribute to manufacturing lots of leading products. However, this will raise the question of whether the government should require these companies to pay a penalty when these enterprises are damaging the environment. I agree with the statement.
First of all, if the governments require these companies to pay a higher fine, it will place a heavy burden on these businesses. For example, TSMC was the top-notch semiconductor chip manufacturing company in the entire world. In the 2010s, TSMC earned over ten billion dollars each year, which accounted for a huge part of the GDP of Taiwan. However, TSMC also induced many extremely serious environmental issues, such as a large amount of heavy metal wastewater. As a result, in 2020, the local government asked TSMC to pay a large fine being up to one hundred million dollars because of its inappropriate disposal of sewage. To avoid the same penalty in the future, TSMC decided to establish many advanced facilities to deal with its sewage discharge. In contrast, if the government had not required TSMC to pay the higher fine, TSMC might have not tackled its environmental problems actively.
Second, if the governments demand the companies to pay a large fine, make the public pay attention to the environmental issues caused by these enterprises. For example, Media Tek was the first-rate semiconductor chip designing company all over the world. In the 2000s, Media Tek gained a lot of yearly profits, up to five billion dollars. However, Media Tek also produced many highly severe environmental problems, such as emitting a good deal of greenhouse gases, like carbon dioxide. Thus, the local government required Media Tek to pay a large fine, which was up to fifty million dollars. Moreover, because lots of media covered this news, many local people realized that this business had generated much harm to their environment. Thus, a good deal of people initiated a campaign to protest these negative behaviors caused by Media Tek. Finally, Media Tek agreed to gradually reduce its emission of greenhouse gases in the future. By contrast, if the government had not asked Media Tek to pay a huge fine, these local people might have not been aware of these environmental issues produced by Media Tek.
To sum up, I agree with the statement that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty. On one hand, the companies will be forced to address their negative influences on the environment to avoid paying the high fine again. On the other hand, the local people will also pay attention to the environmental problems caused by these companies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ding products. However, this will raise the question of whether the government should require these com...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 13.8261648746 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07013574661 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82296102441 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447963800905 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9605637138 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.863636364 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276192626185 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868896688115 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776658334421 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198137513627 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820401174037 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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