Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
Nowadays people need some kind of entertainments that to be avaliable in any time they want. Movies and televisions are the most important entertainment sources in these days. As usual, they mostly address youngs. However, it is not always have positive effects as everyone knows. Some kind of negative effects may take a while to be stablished by children and effect their behaviors. I agree that movies and TV's have more negative effects on society. In the following I will describe two reason of support for my opinion.
First of all, we are leaving in age of technology. Many opportunities and ways exist to teach bad habbits to many ordinary people in the world only by social media platforms such as Twitter, Instagram, YouTube, TV shows or and more. In addition, a children when saws a food or some kind of toy in a TV advertisments or in the movies, he/she will start to ask it from parents. By the time of watching more and more the desire of asking and wanting things will grow and they will learn a habbit of wanting something that they saw. After a while what will happen if parents get boared from that askings. They may even realise that those things may hurt the kidds. On the other hand, the similar issue will happens if they start to stop doing that, the children will start to cry and cry. It is obvious that whatching or overwatching movies and TV shows will have some negative effect if parent don't control it. Nevertheless, this is very familiar phenomena in parenting because the goal of advertisments is to somehow make you sure too buy product which they are advertising.
Secondly, they are stoping youngs from other social interactions. Movies and TV programs may avaliable to everyone in the eartch in 7/24 of the week and hours of day. Even spending 4 hours on a day by following movies or even other programs in YouTube's or other online TV programs, It will results in more than 120 hourses in month and nearly 1500 hours in year, which is a significant for young ages. They are lossing interactions. It happened to me when I was a young, I was spending whole my day on watching to some kind of TV series for months and after finishing the series I was starting another, and another. Without having any goals I was spending my time in home. At the end, I didn't get into the university. I wanted to be a data scientist student in the Stanford university. However, I failed. And then I found out that how much time is goes away by watching TV and movies. I started to avoid following movies or TV series. Then after two years of trying, I am now a majoring in data science and working in the Google company. The best, I can say is movies and television negative effects may become unknow to everyone untill we fail. And that time we will understand the negative effects and behaviors.
To sum up, I beleive that TV and Movies effects are not surly well understood by society. Since, In a case that we are using them more than normal, It will create more negative behaviors, especially in young people, since they are in a golden age to study, learn and grow positive behaviors and features in themself.
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- TOEFL T P O 32 Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 32 Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: VB_A_WHILE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'take awhile'?
Suggestion: take awhile
...nows. Some kind of negative effects may take a while to be stablished by children and effect...
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Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...ube, TV shows or and more. In addition, a children when saws a food or some kind of toy in...
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Line 3, column 704, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'happen'
Suggestion: happen
... the other hand, the similar issue will happens if they start to stop doing that, the c...
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Line 3, column 892, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ill have some negative effect if parent dont control it. Nevertheless, this is very ...
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Line 3, column 1030, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to buy'?
Suggestion: to buy
...vertisments is to somehow make you sure too buy product which they are advertising. ...
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Line 5, column 291, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...es or other online TV programs, It will results in more than 120 hourses in month and n...
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Line 5, column 688, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...spending my time in home. At the end, I didnt get into the university. I wanted to be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, in addition, kind of, such as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2583.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58792184725 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57567096799 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476021314387 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.6790229047 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.71875 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.59375 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78125 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297559783307 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732202288522 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956401215153 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215016776111 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868277482698 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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