Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Youngs are future of the society. We are here but several year from now young people will take our place. Regarding changes in the world from different prespectives, nowadays young people play major rule in the important decisions that determine the future of the society as whole. Young people influences the society in a different ways, in general view point they are involved in the future of the society in a direct or indirect way.
In one hand, the direct way include by studying in college and geting to work in most important positions of the society to serve to the people. Every year many young people graduates from universities and colleges with high digree in engineering, art, economics and so on. After graduation they start their own company, or starting to work in a well deserved places. In this way, they are serving to the society by giving what they have. As a result, they are influencing the society important decisions. As an example, we have several young people in our big family, most of the holds their own digree in engineering. They are working in the best places based on their fields. Each time I was talking to them they had a different story about society . Maybe they didn't feel that they are actually influencing others by working in their own positions and becoming the most important member of society in their job positions. As a result, they are directly influencing the society for good.
On the other hand, the indirect way includes being supportive of others which they believe they have a similar view points. For example, When there is campain for fighting agains environmetal contaminations young people might just stope and join them, to became a part of people which they have fait in right and wrong. As another example, may be they are joining t group of people which trying to collect trash from costal zones. In overall, any social acitivites which they participate and collaborate, they are influencing the future of society. Nowadays, this kind of approach may hidden for different reasons. But they are somehow influence the society now and in the future.
In conclusion, the two main points made are effectively describes that young people today had influence on the future of the society. These approaches or ways may are hidden but they are actually making the influences. If we examine each approaches we may wonder how much young people are influencial in decision making that determine the future of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: 'several years'.
Suggestion: several years
... future of the society. We are here but several year from now young people will take our pla...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'way'?
Suggestion: way
...e influences the society in a different ways, in general view point they are involve...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...they had a different story about society . Maybe they didnt feel that they are act...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ferent story about society . Maybe they didnt feel that they are actually influencing...
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Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...in right and wrong. As another example, may be they are joining t group of people whic...
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Message: Did you mean 'hide' or 'be hidden'?
Suggestion: hide; be hidden
...ty. Nowadays, this kind of approach may hidden for different reasons. But they are som...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'influenced'.
Suggestion: influenced
...different reasons. But they are somehow influence the society now and in the future. I...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hey are actually making the influences. If we examine each approaches we may wonde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, may, regarding, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in general, kind of, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90952380952 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58343651834 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478571428571 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8301256096 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.652173913 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2608695652 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354329410432 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116352490504 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960778919157 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250071035319 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11169972032 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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