Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people are punished.
It goes without saying that media are the most important part of our lives. There has been a controversial debate among people watching movies as to whether televisions must show programs presenting stories in which good people are admired and evil people are punished. From my perspective, showing these kinds of movies are more beneficial, and two reasons to support my view are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, producing movies and programs having quality content, rewarding good people and punishing bad people, country can take the advantage of healthy people. It is not a secret to anyone that media and social network have great and profound impacts on people pursuing their programs, so it is crucial that movies contain good content. Culture and moral principles are being created and translated through different kinds of movies; children as the next generation are under the influence of stories presented in TV, when good individuals are rewarded and evil people end up with bad fate, children will definitely learn to be kind and good people during their lives because they are sure that justice exist for all people being criminals or ordinary. Therefor the precious source of every community, kids, will be more likely to turn into helper and kind individuals since they are aware of the consequences of committing offences. As a result new generation is able to create a better world for human being since they have learnt to be good people and how to distinguish good from evil.
Furthermore, showing stories and programs in which people receive the result being good or bad of their actions and performances, producers will make people who are satisfied with the living. It is crystal clear that humans are being considered as emotional creatures and every story stimulate their feelings; although we are aware that stories shown in TV or other kinds of media are not totally true, we feel happy, unhappy, and angry during and after movies and it is a sign that we should be careful about the content of every program that we are interested in watching. To put it in more vivid picture, when I was a university student, I was use to watching Korean movies all the time, and I remember one of the movies was not happy ending and offenders had not been arrested, so I was depressed for a week and I lost my hope to the world. Had I watched a happy ending movie, I would not have been depressed for a week. Thus, movies should be produced in quality content in order to make people happy and satisfied with the living.
In sum, not only will people take the advantage of living in a peaceful world, they will also be more happy and satisfied with the life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ial debate among people watching movies as to whether televisions must show programs presenti...
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Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: BE_USE_TO_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... when I was a university student, I was use to watching Korean movies all the time,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, thus, as to, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80345572354 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50952033204 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494600431965 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.5950870711 48.9658058833 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.857142857 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0714285714 20.6045352989 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403806156727 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142068885388 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140457174473 0.0737576698707 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232784970139 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10425081707 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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