Nowadays people are more willing to help people they don't know (for example, by giving clothing and food to people who need them) than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world, where we live, helping other people is one of the most important issues. There has been a controversial debate among people living in the present era as to whether people in the past were more supportive. From my perspective, nowadays people do not care about other individuals as their ancestor did, and two reasons to support my viewpoint are presented as follows.
To begin with, in this era people are more independent and they are not willing to help or donate money to charity. It is not a secret to anyone our counterparts living in the past were rely on each other to do different tasks, they were therefore helpful and supportive since they needed others' assistance. Needing people's help, they had to be helpful as well in order to guarantee they would be supported in the future. But, in today's world people are not dependent; we are witnessing that individuals being young or old are relying on themselves and there is no need to get help, meaning they are not inclined to aid other members of their communities, so people will help each other when they need it too and because in this era the majority of people are independent they do not support others. To put it in more vivid picture, my grandfather told me an story about his own experience when he was young he was used to helping farmers in his village since he needed their assistance too, but when he left the village and migrate to a city center after twenty years and became more independent, he was not the same person advocated his neighbors. Had my grandfather not become independent, he would be a supportive man.
Furthermore, through the passage of time, people's beliefs, opinions, and even culture will change. It is crystal clear in this temporary world by the advent and development of science and technology we have different beliefs and moral principles. Although all those living in the past were not good people, there were some moral principles and disciplines whereby individuals would be admired because of their assistance and donations; on the other hand in this time, rarely do people care about the value of helping since the important concepts have been changed, as a result when there is no encouragement to do good, people do not prefer to do so.
In sum, taking aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I disagree with the statement. Not only have people become independent, but their opinions and traditions have been changed as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... among people living in the present era as to whether people in the past were more supportive...
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Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...one our counterparts living in the past were rely on each other to do different task...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'relied'.
Suggestion: relied
...ur counterparts living in the past were rely on each other to do different tasks, th...
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Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...elpful and supportive since they needed others assistance. Needing peoples help, they ...
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Line 3, column 857, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e vivid picture, my grandfather told me an story about his own experience when he ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, as to, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86078886311 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72791476058 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494199535963 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.845600139 48.9658058833 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.642857143 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7857142857 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3366760453 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120987749542 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743173449459 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181964248219 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767117069667 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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