One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them take a part time job
The desire to blossom has permeated every realm of human life ranging from childhood to adulthood. This desire for parents translated to prosperous of their children. Although every parent has a unanimous consensus about the value of thriving of their children, there is a controversy surrounding the optimum way afford their child to reach this goal. Many claims encouraging children to have a part-time job is a key element to this target, while others disagree. From my perspective, there are pros and cons to each statement, but overall, the positive sides of the part-time job outweigh. In the following paragraphs, I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoints.
First and foremost, doing part-time job helps children to be more responsible in their future life. The responsible person is the one can be trusted to do things without strict supervision; If a person takes jobs in their childhood, he learns this characteristic inevitabely because in the young age, children are more prone to learn. Moreover, part-time job brings them about to be a better dicision makers. Nowadays, we should make decisions in our daily life, and because these decision are literal forks in the road with dramatic impacts on cost, time and relationship, teaching decision maing ability is a top priority. The workforce environment, by nature, causes improvments in this ability and the way children spend their income from job enhance their ability more. For example, I have a nephew who is younger than me. It is tradition in our families that person in age 12 should start working, however my uncle resisted this culture and prevent my nephew to that. I see clearly how this decision make bad effects on my nephew; He cannot make the simple decision in his life, and for everything he relies on his parents. This example embodies the importance of part-time job to increase the ability of decision making which is by the way very crucial.
In the second place, part-time job is an opportunity for children to know what they really intrest in? In the early age, children can change their works in every summer, therefore, they could learn they passionate about which fields. Schools cannot assist the student in this goal because they are more engage in science and other academic materials. The fact that the part-time job is the only chance of stuudents to learn their desirable job fortify the importance of part-time job. For example, I worked in a company when I was 11. My father was an engineer at that company; he brought me there to do simple things and meanwhile learn aboutb the job. Now, I am mechanical engineer and without my experiences, I could not select this job. I might have had unsatisfactory job this days if I had had not my old experiences.
In the final analysis, having part-time job not only do children improve their personalities, but also it shed light in them to find their desire filed to study, research and eventually work on that. If you cast doubt about this opinion, consider the biography of well-known people, it clear up your doubts, totally, I bet!
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 73
- Agree/Disagree:It's better for children choose jobs that are similar to their parent' jobs than to choose job that are very different from their parents' jobs. 73
- TPO 25 80
- 28 3
- Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ob. I might have had unsatisfactory job this days if I had had not my old experience...
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Message: Did you mean 'clears'?
Suggestion: clears
... the biography of well-known people, it clear up your doubts, totally, I bet!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, by the way, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2585.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94263862333 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74284299028 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529636711281 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7133214405 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.92 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340200068722 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990643865023 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804954710735 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209839455785 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468769953494 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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