One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Do you agree with this statement?
In this modern era, essential things in life are finding a proper career. For this reason, parents push their children even at a young age to think about future business. While some parents assume that it is essential for teenage children to take a part-time job, I firmly disagree. I believe this way for two crucial reasons. I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, in today's sophisticated world, young students spend more time on schoolwork, and they do not have enough time to work and study simultaneously. Young pupils are at a critical age, and in my opinion, the best method for preparing them for the future is to help them to find the fittest major in university and force them to get used to studying tough. Yet to the best of my knowledge, the more one has high education, the more prepare for future life.
In other words, with the development of a fast-paced society, those who educate can stand out from the crowd.
Secondly, immature children need to play beside their school-stuff so by persuading young children to find the job; They do not have time to play. Therefore, adolescent children cannot play and devoted their evening time to work. Indeed, doing a part-time job have many benefits, but it has not proper for a teenager. Since teenage can gain experience during playing with friends, they should dedicate their time to playing more. The university of Bangladesh recently published that young child who was preoccupied with playing and played enough in free time, in the future, they are more creative than who do not play.
To sum up, although some people believe that having a temporary job for teenage students is vital and can help them to have a successful adult life, I am on the other side for two main reasons. First of all, because I believe that by making a part-time career, young children do not have time to study and study is more vital for them than working at this age. Secondly, parents should encourage young children to play more not to work outside because by playing they can build their behavior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...for preparing them for the future is to help them to find the fittest major in university and for...
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Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...the future, they are more creative than who do not play. To sum up, although s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80277777778 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5223935331 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4220916725 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.705882353 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398740606225 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130305799691 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637865635142 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208961662275 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868154510184 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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