The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people
Due to the advance of technology, celebrities are often seen by people on social media or different platforms and the words they have said are important to people. In my point of view, I believe celebrity's opinion is more crucial for young people compared to older. I feel this way for two reasons.
To begin with, celebrities have a huge influence on young people. Nowadays, young people usually have their idols, they will start dressing like them, acting like them or even intimate the same way they talk. Therefore, their idol's opinion toward a certain thing will also affect the young people's perspective of it. My friend John is a compelling example of this idea. He likes a singer in my country named Richard. Richard is famous because of his outstanding singing skill and unique personality. However, Richard claims that doing drugs are healthy for our body since it can make us relax and find serenity. Although lots of media and people blame what he has promoted, there are still lots of teenagers who are his fans, believe what he had said. John is one of them and he started doing drugs two years ago. As a result, now he is in jail because of drug addiction and he has regretted what had done. This example demonstrates how influential a celebrity's opinion can be.
In addition, old people have their own opinion so they will not affect by the celebrities. Since older people often have obtained more life experience and received a better education, they are more likely to have their own aspect when it comes to an issue or option. Accordingly, they will be less influenced by other's opinions. For instance, in order to make more profit from the products, the modern company usually hire celebrities for advertising. They will promote their products are the best in the market and exaggerate the product's quality. However, when my father is deciding which product to buy, he will not refer to the comments on the internet or the advertisements, because he knows the information is not a personal experience and objective. He will find the information about the products by himself and ask for someone who has used it before, Therefore, my father always buys the best quality of the product because he does not refer the suggestions from advertisements or other celebrities.
In conclusion, I believe older people are less influential in celebrity's opinion. This is because celebrities have a huge influence on young people and old people are intelligent that they will not easily believe others opinion.
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- TPO53 Integrated Writing Task 76
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- TPO43 integrated writing 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 290, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ertain thing will also affect the young peoples perspective of it. My friend John is a ...
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Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...have their own opinion so they will not affect by the celebrities. Since older people oft...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, however, if, so, still, therefore, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89485981308 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.688864592 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492990654206 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.821774739 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0869565217 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6086956522 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262809218936 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850634597802 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927481884959 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219926092634 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089021046226 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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