In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
Governments are responsible for improving the societies’ economic development and thus people’s living standard. Tourism is one of the important industries that can improve the economic development level of a city. From my point of view, government should invest in improving city’s appearance through repairing old buildings and streets instead of enhancing police forces.
It’s true that safety issues are one of the concerns that affects tourists’ travel decision and plan. Especially for international tourists, travelling to a strange city is very challenging and the city have better be safe. However, hiring more police is not the thorough way to improve the safety of a city. It may work for a short time but crime rate is also determined by local people’s living standard and the city’s welfare policy. Actually, improving city’s appearance by repairing city’s historical buildings and streets may also increase the city’s safety because this creates more job opportunities and can improve the tourist industries and thus economic development.
Besides, repairing old buildings is beneficial for preserving the city’s history and culture. Though the old buildings can show they have gone through a long history, as time goes by, they may become dangerous buildings for visiting. Repairing them meanwhile maintaining most of their original characteristics could be the best way to show their history and preserving the history and culture that they represent. The Forbidden City in Beijing is a clear example of old buildings repairment. Palaces in the Forbidden City are built mostly in the 16th century and the paint and wooden structure of them had been aging for hundreds of years. After repairment such as repainting and enhancing the wooden structure, these palaces can be preserved for a much longer time. Now the Forbidden City has become the most famous site in Beijing for tourists. Without repairment these palaces may collapse in an extreme weather like storm in the future, which would be a disaster for culture preservation and tourism industry.
Improving old streets not only help preserve city’s history but also provide convenience to tourists. There are many old streets in China’s cities had been developed into pedestrian streets with local snacks and craft souvenir shops. Tourists can hang around the improved streets, enjoying delicious and special local food and buy souvenirs at the same time.
To sum up, I think it’s more effective for government to invest in improving the city’s appearance through repairing historical buildings and streets instead of enhancing police force.
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- In order to attract more tourists the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets Which way do you think is more effective 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, however, may, so, thus, while, i think, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47804878049 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82107729369 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509756097561 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6521832132 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.3 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285447425046 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979609192105 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106921090323 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19945514144 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.092618123254 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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