Parents should give their children money for better grades.
A lot of psychological theories and textbooks are related to the controversial topic of getting children motivated. Due to the lack of a developed mind, children often fail to see what will benefit them, among those that do, what will help them the most. Probably getting the kids to study is the hardest part of parenting that people have to get through with. To be more specific, over sixty percent of children resist putting away what they enjoy and do their homework. This is a somewhat disquieting issue for their parents and teachers. However, I believe parents can exploit many things as an incentive for overcoming this problem. Among all the motivation, I think money comes the best.
To begin with, getting money out of hard work can teach kids some valuable lessons; Lessons like how hard work pays off and how money is valuable because not only we can buy stuff but also it is hard to achieve. For example, my brother was a troublesome boy. As much as diligence I had toward my education, he found himself interested in video games instead. Thus, my mother used money as a motivation for my little brother to do his homework. He would get some cash each night that he did his exercises. After a while, he saw how his hard work is paying off both financially and academically. His grades began to improve, and he had gathered lots of money that he could buy himself anything he wanted. Had my mother not lit his ambitions with money, he would probably still be playing useless games.
Besides, if this money comes with financial training, it will be beneficial to children's future, as well. By financial training, I mean teaching them how to keep their money, how not to waste it, and how they can get better things by avoiding purchases on small things. Take my brother as an example again, and he learned how to deal with money from that age, whereas I was never blessed with that knowledge. I never had control over my finances, and now I am in trouble because of my out-of-control expenses. However, my brother is and more financially stable, even though I have a better income. Had I learned this from my youth, I would have been able to cope better with my money issues.
All in all, I believe providing incentives for children can be hard. But money has proved to be effective when it comes to motivation. Also, if children are being taught about finance management from an early age, they can carry out this skill throughout their lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, still, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, i mean, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66972477064 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53589250138 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52752293578 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9806082031 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8333333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20731566126 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065042060258 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468258726922 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13805986466 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470357716636 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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