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Patents should play or do homework with children

In this sophisticated and progressive world, our important relationship has changed significantly in comparison with the past, this matter is more obvious in parenting, nowadays they are so busy during the day and the children are damaged by this issue furthermore childhood is one of the most important periods in anybody life and the pattern is shaped by parents and environment endure until adulthood, hence attention to younghood is high of importance and in my way of thinking the best way for a best pleasuring time in a short time is just playing and having fun activities with them. the reasons to substantiate my viewpoint is elaborated upon hereunder.
to begin with, paly has important role for growing up in different aspects of any childlike physically and mentally, play enables them to experience themselves in different situations and improve their mental abilities, so the parents are most significant persons in the child's life and they transfer the feelings of safety to children, play helps to any family to have best moments together and the child never forget these sweet times, my personal experience is a compelling example for what I mean, when I was a tiny girl, had my father worked in far-away city from us and just few days in mounts came for seeing us, in those days , he took me to cinema, park and buying for me different toys, I just was live for my father's coming and I never fit his lacking in my life and we have a great relation together until now, in the psychology it is clear fact that father has main role in his daughters life and the neglecting damage in her mental health which is not able to compensate it subsequently.
moreover, the children know this matter as their right that they should play with parents and if the matter is not happened by their family, they will do the wrong thing to attract their attention to themselves, it is another argument that emphasizes in playing and having fun with children, for protecting themselves from misbehaviors, for instance, my cousin has so neglecting parents who just care about their works, he is just 10 years old, he had run away from home and coming to our home and said to me " they do not like me, they do not play with me" so this quote just manifest to us this important issue that playing with children means parents care about them.
as a consequence, to me, play is an important factor for building a favorable relationship with children and parents should find short

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, for instance, i mean, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75231481481 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69968904039 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502314814815 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 86.0 20.1344086022 427% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 349.351399024 48.9658058833 713% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 410.6 100.406767564 409% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 86.4 20.6045352989 419% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.6 5.45110844103 268% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221078465136 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13363039534 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105428541548 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165831343937 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921490295983 0.0645574589148 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 44.1 11.7677419355 375% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -7.35 58.1214874552 -13% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 35.7 10.1575268817 351% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.45 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.75 8.01818996416 134% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 10.002688172 580% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 36.4 10.0537634409 362% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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