People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different.
Nowadays, the dissatisfaction is one of the biggest problem in the society. People buy everything and always want more and more. Even children want everything that they watch, specially on television.
For the most part, families are exposed to all kind of publicity in many kind of media. It persuade you to buy their articles no matters how much cost or if you really need it. In the most of cases community lose the battle against the media and buy their stuff. Moreover, you finally acquire that thing, even if you don’t need it or you already have it. For example: the last day I saw a commercial in television, then I went to the shop for checking the tv price but I didn’t have enough of money for buying it.
Generally speaking, kids enjoys playing with their toys and always want new toys, especially those toys in media commercial. In addition, it seduce offsprings to ask and beget to their parents for going to the store and purchase toys. On the whole, consumerism hit to all part of the society, even they. For instance, my cousin has many toys and his parents buy to them all the toys that he wants. In fact, almost all children are like my cousin.
In conclusion the principal guilty of dissatisfaction is the television. Personally, it is a problem that people all over the world have. In the most of cases that is not their fault. Furthermore the media is a very powerful gun that has the power to control all the world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 69, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'many kinds'.
Suggestion: many kinds
...are exposed to all kind of publicity in many kind of media. It persuade you to buy their ...
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Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'persuades'?
Suggestion: persuades
... of publicity in many kind of media. It persuade you to buy their articles no matters ho...
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Line 3, column 525, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s;t have enough of money for buying it. Generally speaking, kids enjoys playing ...
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Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seduces'?
Suggestion: seduces
...ys in media commercial. In addition, it seduce offsprings to ask and beget to their pa...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the cases') or simply say ''most cases''.
Suggestion: most of the cases; most cases
... people all over the world have. In the most of cases that is not their fault. Furthermore th...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
... most of cases that is not their fault. Furthermore the media is a very powerful gun that h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, then, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1204.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 260.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63076923077 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60916681707 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546153846154 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 365.4 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3185048381 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.8235294118 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2941176471 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122198460569 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438970483233 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720859264513 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0926222630818 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082764256498 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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