People generally buy the things not because they need it but it is because others have it. Agree and disagree?
In contemporary society, generally people buy many things in routine life because they required those things. But sometimes people are purchasing those things because of other have it, make standard in society and commercial advertisement. I agree the statement that people buy the things not for their requirement but they buy things because of others have it. I favor the statement because of following reasons.
To begin with, young generations are more allured the new things such as electronic gadget, trendy attires, automobiles etc. It is normally happened that children are force to their parent to buying new things because their friends have it. I had experience in my home. One month ago, my younger brother bring new smart phone because of his friend has that phone. Although his has not need phone for study, he buy it.
Furthermore, some people boast to other that he/she is belonging to richer or wealthier family. It is most happened in the city area, where people buy unnecessary thing for only show up not buy for really needs. For an example, in my society everyone has own car, my neighbor is new in the society. After, one month she buy car. Her mother asked her why she buy expensive car. She told her mother that she bought it because of she feel shy that she only has no own car and all society members have their own car to each family member that is a reasons she buy car. I really shocked at that time to listen her reasons that she buy car for only show off that she also richer and her father has also car.
Moreover, advertisement and friend influence to people. Sometimes people misunderstand or attract things and buying it. People see the advertisement of products on television, media, and newspaper. And when some friend talk about the products and their feature people easily attracted to the product because of he has already see the feature in advertisement and friend also talking about that. For an instance, I recently bought mop because of my friend and sales manger insist me that it is benefit to us that easily cleaning the floor without hard work.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, children as well as adults buy the things because other people have it. This situations happened because of influence of friend and relative, for maintain status is society, and attraction of things.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 385, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
...nd has that phone. Although his has not need phone for study, he buy it. Furthermor...
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Line 2, column 410, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'buys'.
Suggestion: buys
...gh his has not need phone for study, he buy it. Furthermore, some people boast to ...
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Line 3, column 53, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[3]
Message: The verb belong is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'belongs'
Suggestion: belongs
... some people boast to other that he/she is belonging to richer or wealthier family. It is mo...
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Line 3, column 53, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... some people boast to other that he/she is belonging to richer or wealthier family. It is mo...
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Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...car, my neighbor is new in the society. After, one month she buy car. Her mother aske...
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Line 3, column 320, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'buys'.
Suggestion: buys
...ew in the society. After, one month she buy car. Her mother asked her why she buy e...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'buys'.
Suggestion: buys
...e buy car. Her mother asked her why she buy expensive car. She told her mother that...
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Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because she' instead.
Suggestion: because she
... She told her mother that she bought it because of she feel shy that she only has no own car a...
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Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a reason' or simply 'reasons'?
Suggestion: a reason; reasons
...r own car to each family member that is a reasons she buy car. I really shocked at that t...
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Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'buys'.
Suggestion: buys
...ach family member that is a reasons she buy car. I really shocked at that time to l...
^^^
Line 4, column 301, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because he' instead.
Suggestion: because he
... people easily attracted to the product because of he has already see the feature in advertis...
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Line 4, column 327, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'seen'.
Suggestion: seen
...o the product because of he has already see the feature in advertisement and friend...
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Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...he things because other people have it. This situations happened because of influenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, well, in brief, such as, talking about, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84863523573 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57324047434 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473945409429 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4259820892 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9565217391 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5217391304 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423099157294 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138963243006 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145713375491 0.0737576698707 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280605808398 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175504320161 0.0645574589148 272% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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