There are many ways to learn new things. Some people are inclined to learn with their friends or co-workers. However, others prefer to choose expert's vision. As for me, learning new things with people who are teachers or supervisors is much more easier. I feel this way for 2 reasons, which I explore in my following essay.
First of all, learning new topic with same level people is not as easy as seemed. Even though it is free to share knowledge, these people can easily do same mistakes about topic and repeat themselves, which is the most obstacle point for learning progress. My own experience is a good example of this. I was studying in the university and we were doing the gradutation thesis as a group. Although we progressed our thesis in a short time, we stucked in some point and insisted on doing on our own then we failed to graduate. Next year I took on my own with my supervisor professor and I did quicklier than last tried because she could easily grasped my deficiencies and I graduated by success So, experts have profound knowledge about topic and we can do quickly and succeed with them
Second all of, when we do somethings or learn somethings with friend. after some specific time, there are likely to make jokes or start talking in each other and we lose our adaptation to lessons. However, if we learn with experts which we usually pay to them in that we do not want to waste any minutes and they usually do not let us when we want to try to change topic. For example, when I start learning english. I tried to learn with friends. it was fun and we get enjoyed to much but I could not get any progression in 3 months then I enrolled english courses for two months in the university. Even I found it was boring and wanted to give up, I enhanced my level because our teacher never let us talk in the lessons. Thus, I significantly boosted my level of english in two months,If only I have enrolled in hand to this english courses.
To sum up, studying with experts are the best way to progress and flourish. Teachers or supervisors usually experience points many times.So, they are able to find student's deficiency easily and they do not let to lose adaptation during the lessons
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, then, thus, as for, for example, i feel, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50374064838 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50694770311 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501246882793 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4190032082 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.05 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0954483401784 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376077634401 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380331054177 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0649122675869 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256373210228 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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