People should buy things made in their own county, even if they are more expensive than things made in others country
We are living in complex age buying everything have a profound effect on people living in that country. Although some people would like to buy what they need from others country, I firmly concur with the idea that people should buy things made in their own country. There are some reasons, the most important of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, it is undoubted that buying something made in own country directly effect of the ratio unemployment. As a matter of fact, if people buy something made in their country, companies can growth and hire more people. To illustrate this fact one only refer to numerous advanced countries which they do not have job problems. Seldom do people have better life if do not have decent job. Although they should spend more money on buying something, what results from buying from own country are to boost our economy you provide better life for people. To demonstrate, there is a general consensus among scientists all over the world that buying something directly effect on people's lives. So they established an experimental worldwide to estimate the effectiveness of this issue on one's life. The results are surprising: approximately 90% percent of people who do not buy their country, are ones having hard mental diseases deriving from lack of a decent job.
The second reason why I agree with it is that if people buy their country, businessman are encouraged to establish their business. As a result, the taxes earned by these companies allow government to provide better life condition for people. So, were I be a determiner in our country, I would have forced people to buy what their need from what made in own country. For example my father was a mayor in our town, there was a time that he said people if you buy things made in our town, I will construct many parks, libraries and pools. People started buying things made in our town and my father was able to construct the mentioned facilities. Had people not bought our town's products, my father would not have constructed these facilities.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effect of buying things made in own country. Not only are they able to provide a lot of job opportunities for people, but also they can experience better life by taxes are earned. For this reason, I highly recommended that people buy the product made in own country to bring themselves several lucrative consequences like what mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
... have better life if do not have decent job. Although they should spend more money ...
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Line 2, column 584, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
... for people. To demonstrate, there is a general consensus among scientists all over the world tha...
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Line 2, column 896, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...eople who do not buy their country, are ones having hard mental diseases deriving fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, for example, as a matter of fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8243559719 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57844901484 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466042154567 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4033008645 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.35 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358850623605 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119722412659 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929091352923 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245890437349 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203496676415 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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