There are numerous reasons why people work.Earning money is indispensable to meet basic needs.Barring these needs,people have several needs in terms of entertainment or hobbies for which money is required.As fas as I am concerned,money is an important factor to fulfill our dreams and also to provide a healthy life.
First of all,there are hundred of thousands people out there encountering with diverse problems without finding out considerable solutions.In this regard, extra curricular activities like going to gym,community centre,sports activity,photography or expeditions help them to find respite from their daily hectic schedule.Indulging yourself in such activites keep you away from emotional turmoil,pending works,unresolved problem and health issues.Hence,people often invest their money in such activities. My experience is a compelling example of this.My job is very stressful and tedious.To alleviate my stress , I often go to vacation with my friends which helps to restore all serenity and vitality of my life.If I had no money,i could not afford such trips.
Secondly,nowadays the cost of health checkups,surgery and medical tests has been increasing at a skyrocketing rate.To get a good insurance plan, you must need a decent amount of money.Everybody wants their family to be safe and health and also want to provide best medical treatment to cure their ailments.I would like to shed some light on this aspect with a vivid example.Recently,my uncle was diagnosed witha a heartblock which required a surgery.This surgery costed an arm and a leg. As my cousing worked in a multinational company,he afforded the cost of surgery easily.So to provide medical treatment and to take care of your family ,money is significant.
In conclusion,in this world full of worries and unresolved problem,it is really important to spend some time by engaging yourself into entertainment or other hobbies.And at the same time money gives us access to afford health treatment which of utmost importance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55700325733 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.66317228217 2.67179642975 137% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.654723127036 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 20.1344086022 253% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.126187018 48.9658058833 249% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 284.333333333 100.406767564 283% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.1666666667 20.6045352989 248% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.5 5.45110844103 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 40.0 5.5376344086 722% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189160095726 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921766512974 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768681990383 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116328304247 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08041440505 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.3 11.7677419355 257% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.25 58.1214874552 19% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 6.10430107527 260% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 10.1575268817 240% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.86 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.95 8.01818996416 137% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 33.5 10.002688172 335% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 10.0537634409 223% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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