Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them
It is widely believed that computer games are of no benefit to children; therefore, the subject of whether children should be permitted to play computer games is of increasing concern. In my point of view, the time children are allowed to play video games should be restricted.
First and foremost, excessive use of video games would cause children not to have adequate quality time to spend on their school lessons, resulting in low performance at school. Not only does playing video games waste children’s time, it also leads to lack of concentration. Recent researches have indicated that kids who spend plenty of time in front of a computer monitor playing games, are more likely to have difficulty focusing on their studies or face memory problems.
Furthermore, computer games keep children at home and away from other kids, therefore they lose the opportunity to improve communication skills in face to face situations. Since social skills are of paramount importance to be successful in modern age, it is necessary that parents encourage children to play less video games and instead do more outdoors activities. In addition, playing video games prevents children from exploring the world around them and impedes their creativity development.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the amount of time children devote to playing computer games should be strictly limited. In my opinion, playing these games should be replaced with worthwhile activities like doing sport, pursuing a hoppy, and playing outside, which all are beneficial to develop new skills. Since childhood is the best time to learn critical skills, children should not miss this significantly important stage of life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 128, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...puter games should be strictly limited. In my opinion, playing these games should ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 269.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33457249071 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8066594449 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587360594796 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8703334349 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.454545455 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.602794198108 0.236089414692 255% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.249477047712 0.076458572812 326% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137045606018 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.383190257166 0.150856017488 254% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127336375341 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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