The rules that the whole society today expect young people follow are too strict.
Since the dawn of civilization, rules have had the greatest roles in people’s lives all around the world. Although some people believe that society expect follow their roles strictly, I firmly concur with the idea that society should give more freedom to young people to show all their ability. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, it is undoubted that so influential has limitation been that it has had a great number of negative effects on individual's life all around the world, yet above all it has distracted young people and they do not do what there is their mind. To illustrate this fact, on needs only refer to numerous society imposing their ideas on young people by making restriction rules. Take a personal experience as an example, there was a time that I won a scholarship to continue my study from abroad due to that my country had enacted the rule that student who are under 18 cannot go abroad resulting in I could not follow my goals. I firmly believe that had they enacted this role, I would have gone abroad to continue my study and become learned people after graduation.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that on the one hand some people believe that society should control young people strictly because they cannot make a great decision by lack of experience and these roles protect them from any harmful situations, yet on the other hand some people believe that young people are supposed to attend the society in the near future and they should have more freedom to earn more experience which brings them promising future. Hence, I strongly agree with the latter viewpoint and I do believe that the more society enact restriction roles, the more their their talent lose. By way of illustration, the noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that 90 percentage of prosperous businessmen, are one who have more freedom when they are young.
To make a long story short, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that no one can deny the enormous positive effects of having more freedom on young people's lives. Not only are they able to become successful in their future lives, but also society cannot impose their opinion on them. For this reason, I highly recommend that it is an obligatory task for society to growth people with much less restriction rules.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 86
- college should offers more courses to prepare student for the future before they start working. 73
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 125, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...d a great number of negative effects on individuals life all around the world, yet above al...
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Line 2, column 575, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'cannot' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'cans'.
Suggestion: cans
... the rule that student who are under 18 cannot go abroad resulting in I could not foll...
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Line 2, column 749, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...to continue my study and become learned people after graduation. Furthermore, it is e...
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Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: their
...ciety enact restriction roles, the more their their talent lose. By way of illustration, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90267639903 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57651481939 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506082725061 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.5496577307 48.9658058833 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.0 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6153846154 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232918728533 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827398500634 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678727297679 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154817550753 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459103439227 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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