Junk foods production has an unbelievable growth in these years that all health institutions concern about its progress. This is controversial between people that is junk food bad for human being or it just a freaky concern. Some say fatty food is the same of the other types of food and it does not harm an individual but most of people emphasis it is a dangerous food for all segments of society. I agree with the theory which says placing a tax on the junk foods are the best way to control them. I explain my view in following reasons:
first of all, all medical researches prove the possibility of cancer will raise in people who consume junk foods because of their ingredients have been found within them. Fast food providers use oily materials to make their products delicious while frying oil has the most dangerous effects on body. In addition researchers find these commercial companies that focus on their profit use edible color or breaded powder which are very detrimental to persons. Although they are trying to change perspective of countries to this fact by using vegetable oil or more healthier products in their process but many people do not believe their advertising.
Secondly, almost all governments try to control this food for kids without any exception because the fatty food is low nutrition product and in long-term period a country will have people with a weak health system. Some medical researchers disagree with snacks for this reason that they stop even growing of a child because in addition they are void in nutrition they even remove good effects of the other foods which child gets during the day. For example potato chips as a junk food with its high fat rate stops absorbing vitamins in body and according to scientists it is the most perilous affect of snacks.
In conclusion, place tax as a regulation activity for decreasing consumption of this bad food is a commonplace strategy for health ministries of governments to make sure the communities do not use damaging meals. However some say it has reverse result to prohibit people from using a goods but many agree with this control system. Tax cause manufactures and fast food services to make less money and also increase price of food which decline demand of snacks for all people. Additionally the revenue from taxes would be invested in changing behavior of consumers or improve health institution efficiency.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I explain my view in following reasons: first of all, all medical researches pro...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...plain my view in following reasons: first of all, all medical researches prove th...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... the most dangerous effects on body. In addition researchers find these commercial compa...
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Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... to this fact by using vegetable oil or more healthier products in their process but many peop...
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Suggestion: However,
... communities do not use damaging meals. However some say it has reverse result to prohi...
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Suggestion: a good; goods
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...ecline demand of snacks for all people. Additionally the revenue from taxes would be investe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91911764706 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61782949904 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.3601489873 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247027760564 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890795706367 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666711888172 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158319856644 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721334741706 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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