Have you ever happened to think that it is a good idea that your kid has a job while studying? Indeed, it is not, for there are many drawbacks they can encounter. In this essay, I will describe three reasons why it is not a good idea that teenagers work while studying, among which productivity at school, getting sick, and school drop-out rates are the most important.
Firstly, adolescents having jobs while studying is not a good idea for their productivity at school. Sometimes, their grades are low due to the amount of time they have to spend at work. For instance, I used to work at night while I was at high-school, and since then I did not do it well. Moreover, a teenager does not have the opportunity to master a topic. From my own experience, I just studied what I had to without deeply search for more references, so this did not allow me to enrich my knowledge.
Secondly, teenagers can be more vulnerable to get sick when working and studying. Due to the stress, most teenagers suffer from irritable vowels, headaches and other stress. For example, once my neighbor made the decision to work while studying, and she ended up suffering from stress because she could not handle the situation. In addition, my brother did the same, and he got the disease of irritable vowels for the little amount of time he had to eat.
Thirdly, it is not a good idea for teenagers to work while studying because they tend to drop out from school. Most students prefer to make money rather than study. For example, my sister worked last year as baby-sitter, and she decided stop her studies and put it off until next year, she was in the senior year though. Furthermore, some adolescents drop out for having more job experiences. A friend of mine thought that his job was helping them to develop technical skills something that the school did not teach him.
In conclusion, I have described three reasons why teenagers do not have to work; productivity, getting sick and school drop-out are the most important. In my opinion, these three reasons are essential for me to consider not a good idea that teenagers work while studying.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71313672922 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59119962399 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520107238606 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9171416318 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5263157895 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6315789474 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63157894737 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24067591808 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874353352313 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845903334846 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160481826577 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829742023957 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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