In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
Have you ever thought whether it is a good idea that your teens have jobs while studying? Indeed, it is not, for there are many drawbacks they can encounter. In this essay, I will describe three reasons why it is not a good idea that teenagers work while studying: productivity at school, getting sick, and school drop-out rates are the most important.
Firstly, it is not a good idea that teenagers have jobs while studying because of deficient productivity at school. Sometimes, their grades are low due to the amount of time they spend at work. For instance, I used to work at night while I was at high-school, and since then I did not do it well. Moreover, a teenager does not have the opportunity to master a topic. For example, I just studied what I had to without looking for more references, so this did not allow me to enrich my knowledge.
Secondly, teenagers can be more vulnerable to get sick when working and studying. Due to the stress, most teenagers suffer from irritable vowels, headaches and other stress. For example, once my neighbor made the decision to work while studying, and she ended up suffering from stress because she could not handle the situation. In addition, my brother did the same, and he got the disease of irritable vowels for the little amount of time he had to eat.
Thirdly, it is not a good idea for teenagers to work while studying because they tend to drop out from school. Most students prefer to make money rather than study. For example, my sister worked last year as a baby-sitter, and she decided stop her studies and put it off until next year, she was in the senior year though. Furthermore, some adolescents drop out for having more job experiences. As an example, a friend of mine thought that in his job he developed technical skills something that he would have learned at school.
In conclusion, in this essay I have described three points why teenagers should not work; productivity, getting sick and school drop-out are the most important. In my opinion, these three reasons are essential for me to consider not a good idea that teenagers work while studying.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70698924731 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60939823105 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513440860215 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9552398273 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1578947368 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94736842105 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234028811061 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856365662105 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818658831756 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157878125512 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806595717032 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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