Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
When it comes to the issue do celebrities deserve to have high incomes, some people believe that they have a constructive role in the society, and they merit for having high salaries. They would like to vote for such a plan of buildings because of its advantages. However, others maintain the opposite view, and they think that famous people should not receive high incomes. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
The first and most important reason is that their salaries base on their talent. As we all know, their gain the reputation because of a unique talent, special performance, and surely; hard working. They could teach our juveniles to make more efforts, focus on their talent, and ignore ones who say them that it could not be possible. I think that there in no better example than Cristiano Ronaldo, who was the former player for Manchester united and Real Madrid. He was living in a poor family, while he had great ambitions. For satisfy these, when he was a little boy, he had to left home and went to another city for improving his football skills. Hard work makes him a great footballer so that he now is a hero for million of youth around the world. Generally, he deserves to receive more revenue, because he sacrificed their childhood for reach this position. I think that they have a crucial role in society to encourage teenagers for being more active.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. Famous people make plenty of job opportunities for others. A person who is famous tries to invest their asset in variety businesses. In this way, abundant of people work for them and their vocation depend on his or her success. I think that a small example can give some light on this topic. Bill Gates, who is well-known person in the field of IT, established the Microsoft Company. Nowadays, more than half million of people work there. In addition, this company provides a condition that many people across the world make money by computer. Overall, the biggest advantage of high incomes for celebrities lies in the fact that they use this money for making job opportunities for others.
Apart from the points I made above there is they devotes a part of their income for charity activities. It is an ordinary customs, famous people take Apart from the points I made above, they devote a part of their income for charity activities. This is a common tradition that famous people take part in the charity activates, and they use their fame and money to encourage others to these activities. For example, Bill Gates who was the richest man in the world devoted ninety-eight percent of his assets for expanding welfare among African people. Overall, they could make better conditions in society, and their success is helpful for others.
Taking into account all of these factors, we may reach the conclusion that high revenues of celebrities obviously stimulate people to work hard, make career opportunities for others, and also expand charity activates. Of course, those who take the opposite view are partly reasonable that a great difference between people’s incomes can intensify society inequalities. Nonetheless, I think that its benefits outweigh dangers. Last but not least, let us hope famous people more attention to their behavior, because their fans imitate their manner.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'devote'
Suggestion: devote
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'custom'?
Suggestion: custom
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'apart from', 'for example', 'i think', 'in addition', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248073959938 0.229887763892 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.138674884438 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0878274268105 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0338983050847 0.046263068375 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0878274268105 0.0685040099705 128% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.129429892142 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0154083204931 0.0351676179071 44% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.55398476948 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.020030816641 0.0309702414327 65% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0862865947612 0.0887237588012 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0138674884438 0.0209618222197 66% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0138674884438 0.0139019557991 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3408.0 2387.08602151 143% => OK
No of words: 577.0 408.028673835 141% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90641247834 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355285961872 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254766031196 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.157712305026 0.174417080927 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102253032929 0.112833075102 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55398476948 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499133448873 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 61.2952487205 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6684587814 155% => OK
Sentence length: 18.03125 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0446893912 48.84282405 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 120.699889404 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.03125 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.46875 0.644075263715 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 43.5078531196 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.50887573964 1.45489161554 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187463112198 0.300154397459 62% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0997029765626 0.103427244359 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.128487712268 0.0752933317313 171% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.417635957871 0.497263757937 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.124582256431 0.151897553556 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636798884123 0.114077575197 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494228275069 0.0781384742642 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.355519306969 0.336927656856 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0634322485732 0.067059652881 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139013530685 0.210909579961 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348834063192 0.0618886996521 56% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8870967742 193% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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