These days, I see many children looking at a phone at the park with their friends. So, obviously there has been some parents give phones to their kids. In general, adults such as parents appreciate the phones because it makes our working condition easier and better. In contrast, children need to focus on their study and try to learn to get in the society so it is not necessary to own phones now. I agree with the statement that parents forbid kids to have their own phones. The following two paragraphs are holding my opinion.
First of all, phones are interrupting children when they study. The other day, I went to library to study and few kids have studied at the same table with me. While they were there, their phones are on the table and they could check it whenever they got a mail so it distracted them. Also, they have used online dictionary to look up words which they did not know instead of using paper dictionary. Even they just would need to find the one specific word, the advertisment on the website and the notification of message annoyed with their study. Thus, phones make bad effection to kids's education environment.
Second, children should make a space from phones and have some time to talk with their family and friends. For example, there was a problem between my friends when we were junior high school students. At the time, we had chatting group online, one day one guy began to complain about his best friend and the other friend took a screen shot then sent it to the person who were betrayed by the guy in the group. It caused big trouble between us especially the guy had bad mouthing had to take care of his responsibility that he hurted his friends. Phones made it easier to keep in touch with people around us, meanwhile the children should learn how to behave as a responsible person and being in the society. When they hang out with family or friends, they have to communicate in person with different communicating tools such as eye contact, voice pitch, and face expression. Hence, I would say kids need to have actual time with people without phones.
All of considered, the phones made bad effection to children society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 490, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...bid their kids to have their own phones.The following two paragraphs are holding my...
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Line 5, column 696, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: they
...on and being in the society. As long as they they hang out with family and friends, they ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, look, second, so, then, thus, while, for example, in contrast, in general, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58780487805 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39872685843 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526829268293 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6662647471 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.05 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254988112721 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824989574901 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445269262451 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157371163176 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210893671893 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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