Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
The fast develpment of technology in the 21th century undoubtedly changed people's traditions of life and study. It is no wonder that a lot of controversies arise since the widespread of smartphone, a device more than a conventional phone which can be embedded with numerous other applications of various functions to aid its owner to complete different tasks. As for the question whether parents should forbid young children from owning smart phones, I believe it is for young children's most benefits to forbid them from owning smartphones.
First, nowadays young children are so easily addicted to smartphone games and social media websites that lots of them glue their heads to the devices and they started to spare no time for academic study and outdoor activities. Some parents complain that when their childeren own smartphones, they spend hours and hours playing the online games or chatting with their friends. One of my students spent almost 10 hours per day playing smartphone games in bed during the summer holidays and he even rarely went out of his room. After one summer, he lost a lot of weight and became obviously ill. Thus, we can see, once a child owns his/her smartphone, it is more possible that the device is used for entertainment other than the good intention parents hoped for.
However, some parents might argue, it is necessary for them to keep in touch with their children and with smartphones, if there is any emergency, they can contact their children immediately so that the convenience and safety of life can be guaranteed. The truth is, nowadays, people have become too reliant on the edged technologies that they have forgot numerous old yet effective technologies are still ideal options for them. To complete the function of keeping in touch with their children, other than iPhone X or Samsung smartphones, a quaint model from NOKIA, with the simple functions of calling and sending messages, can also meet the requirements.
Yet, the sturbon parents keep arguing, "What about keep in touch in school and teachers? Now, school are heavliy relying on WhatsApp sending notice and assginments to students in groups so that they can be informed immediately. Without using a smartphone, my child will feel isolated of his peers." Certainly, we have to admit such phenomenon is predominant among schools and students, but it does not justify smartphones become the only option for students keep in touch with schools. As the NOKIA phones mentioned before, why do people forget we have the great invention of email, which can guarantee efficiency while making people feel less stressful since they are not expected to reply immdiately.
To sum, for young children, they still have lots of other options when the function of keeping in touch with parents and schools is required. Since young people's addiction to mobilephones is a universial problem, we should be wary of such potientials when our children own one smartphone. Therefore, whenever it is possible, do not buy your children a mobilephone until s/he is old enough to resist the lures brought by this device.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Use past participle here: 'forgotten'.
Suggestion: forgotten
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2608.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09375 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73504456088 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54296875 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.6333457619 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.888888889 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297418862514 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090785945945 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077302822985 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174361432227 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474346124319 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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