Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

No one cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of getting good grades for students at school-age in modern societies. A controversial question which is often raised in this area is whether acclaiming student's good grades by giving them money is a good idea or not. Although some people are inclined towards the idea that it's one of the best-tested rewarding methods, I personally believe otherwise. Accordingly, in what follows I will try to provide some cogent reasons to support my statement.

First and foremost, rewarding children for one of each good grades they get is too much that some way in the road of applying this method, it will definitely lose its impact on student's attitude or even lead him to do the exact opposite of the usual action to be a rebellion and see the punishment instead. Psychologically speaking, according to a research that was conducted by the best neuroscientist in Germany, the repetition of an action in the response of a person's behavior, either reward or punishment, will not have a long-lasting effect on the subject because of the sense of routineness and its habituality. This ritual may lead the subject to act totally opposite of what he was doing since then to just break the rules and see the result of his attitude. Therefore, it is recommended to change the reward or punishment attitude toward children who specially go to school.

Another reason which I think is worthy to be mentioned is, rewarding good grades of a child is an external action and an external motivation for a student. As a matter of fact, these types of motivations will not last long and they have very damaging impacts on that person's future because in every step of their life they are waiting for others' endorsements. My own cousin was raised exactly through this method and I cannot remember a single time in which she was not confused and overwhelmed during making a decision; even the easy decisions like choosing a pair of pants! I vividly remember the time that she took a picture of a pair of pants and send it to me to have my blessing for buying it. It was both a funny and also sad moment actually because I witnessed how unconfident and fragile she become.

For the matter of conclusion, considering the mentioned reasons, I think if parents reward their children with money for each high grade they get in school is not the best idea. Although, it was just the story in a nutshell and there are definitely more reasons that should be considered. In the end, according to the importance of the topic, I think more studies should be done to evaluate this issue.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, i think, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72967032967 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76467093626 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518681318681 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.5772373033 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.466666667 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325261898612 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10376375796 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119157617169 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206039547728 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840675625783 0.0645574589148 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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