Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that offering money or award to school-age children for getting good grades in school have several educational and psychological benefits for children. So most parents do it. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that if parents offer money for each high mark, it leads to students do not understand the main aim of study and education and it would be harmful in the long-term for their study. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that offering money to school-age children for each high grade they get in school is a good idea.
First and foremost, giving money to children is a kind of prize and could motivate them for more study at school. It can increase happiness and positive feelings in children. For example, I believe approximately all of us have a similar experience during our study at school. I remember my father had promised that if I take 19 (out of 20) in my mathematics course, he would buy my favorite earrings to me. After I got it, I was encouraged to study in harder to earn more prize.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that offering money is a good way to taught children how to set a goal in their life. The school-age children are too young to understand the importance of getting high marks on their future life. Nonetheless, an award is more familiar as a goal to them. In addition, when students seek to reach their goals, it provides them with a sense of responsibility about decisions. For instance, when I was trying to get mark 19, my study hours became more regular, I weak up sooner for study and I had fewer wasted time.
Finally, yet importantly, students learn how to manage their own extra money. Budget managing like any other skills should be taught to children. For example, parents give options such as, deposited it in a bank, keep it to buy a toy and etc. In this way not only this money stimulate children for better study at school, but also it is a good opportunity for training living skills.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that offering money to school-age children for each high grade they get in school is a good idea. Because it works as a motivation factor and make get a goal to them and taught them how to manage their money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ited it in a bank, keep it to buy a toy and etc. In this way not only this money stimula...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60911270983 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5996509033 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517985611511 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.721499374 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.537416754491 0.236089414692 228% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159585484262 0.076458572812 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168414751304 0.0737576698707 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327154992236 0.150856017488 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.184434336591 0.0645574589148 286% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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