some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade the get in school. do you think this is a good idea?

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some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade the get in school. do you think this is a good idea?

Since the beginning of the last century, education has become so crucial to to our society. Some people hold the voice that they should encourage their children to study by giving them money reward for their high grades, however there is a solid body of opinion that casts doubt on these beliefs. From a personal perspective, I disagree with the attitude of offering children money for each high grade in the school given that have a negative impact on their personality, responsibility, and success. Below I will strive my supportive points in more details.
The foremost point, giving school-age kids money for each high grade will make them used to get rewards for each good thing s they do. A recent survey conducted by Oxford University found that children who got money reward for their high grades addicted to this attitude, to say it in another word, they want to get rewards for each good behavior such as listening to their parents, siting well, or even being helpful. Furthermore, parents should learn their children to study as hard as they can and get high grades, given that it will have positive effect on their future. Consequently, offering kids money as reward has a negative effect on their personality.
Next, coupled with the negative impact on personality, responsibility is another reason why parents should not give their kids money for their high grades. Children should fell responsible about their study. A vivid example that will shed a light on what was elaborated above is The Montessori school learning system does not give their students any reward, because that not only has bad effect on their responsibility, but also on their learning potential outcomes. Learning children to get high grades because it is their responsibility not to get money is very important.
Although the previous points are the first across the mind in a glance, but they are not the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle point which must be born in mind. Parents should learn their kids the importance of the success which will have a positive impact on their professional livelihood.
Taking everything into a consideration, without a doubt giving school-age children money reward for their high grades is bad idea and underestimating the negative impact of this attitude is not logical. It is suggested that teachers inform parents about the negative impact of that way of rewarding and design another way to motivate children to succeed.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, so, well, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03902439024 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.684150497 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478048780488 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9281878377 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.529411765 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1176470588 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70588235294 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429603600527 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144613570226 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118348303937 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250102957586 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116669541651 0.0645574589148 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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