Some people believe that it is important to follow traditions even when those traditions conflict with or are quite different from their own individual preferences. Other people believe that individual preferences are more important than traditions. Which view do you agree with and why?
There is no denying that in each society, there are different norms and rules people should consider to better live there. In this regard, some think traditional and ancient beliefs are actually rules that people need to obey, regardless of their interests and penchants( even though they contradict their interests), while I disagree, believing that people’s preferences should take priority over traditions for some reasons, two of which are as follows:
First, if people follow traditions not aligned with their interests, their emotions and efficiency will negatively be affected. From psychological perspective, individuals need to do activities they are interested in because in this way, they will be more involved in them, leading them to achieve favorable outcomes during their lives. By contrast, when they are compelled to do what they don’t believe in, their productivity will decrease, and they will be exhausted. In fact, if people living in this age ignore their interests and do what ancient people believed in, they realize these traditions cannot respond to their demands and goals appropriately, making them feel disappointed and depressed. For example my grandmother was so eager to learn and play piano when she was a young girl, but her father didn’t allow her to do so since it was not acceptable for women to play a musical instrument in their society. Although she could have done it without her father’s permission, she didn’t like to do it in a way opposite to the traditions of that period of time. She still regrets and thinks had she learned piano, she would be happier and more successful.
Second, traditional ways are obsolete and not suitable for today’s issues, so people should pay attention to their own solutions and preferences. To make it clear, due to vast advancements developed quickly in today’s world, people encounter more complex problems than they did in the past, requiring them to find useful ways so as to deal with them properly. In this situation, ancient ways are not practical and cannot be applied to today’s matters. For instance, given the current economic situation, meaning that the costs of living is rising at an alarming pace, both men and women need to work long hours to cover their needs; however, women were not allowed to work and earn money on their own in the past. They completely depended on men and were required to do just chores affairs at home. This example indicates people cannot rely on traditions in today’s modern world where issues are different from ones ancient people experienced during their lives.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people should attach more importance to their interests in comparison with traditions. This is because they can better not only achieve prominent results but also tackle their obstacles.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider bettering', 'consider welling'.
Suggestion: consider bettering; consider welling
...different norms and rules people should consider to better live there. In this regard, some think ...
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Line 3, column 1056, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... way opposite to the traditions of that period of time. She still regrets and thinks had she l...
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Line 4, column 326, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ast, requiring them to find useful ways so as to deal with them properly. In this situat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6990812577 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538961038961 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.4741894949 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.5 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.875 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301377021768 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911432089439 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888192055818 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186813798451 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556487063929 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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