Some people have ambitious dreams and keep pursuing them, but other people always focus on realistic goals and try to achieve them. Which do you think is better and why?
every person have some goals in life which someone wants to achieve in life, these goal may be a ambitious goals which are rare or tough to achieve while some people have realistic goals which are practical and can be achieved after some hard work in life. In my opinion one must follow his ambitious goals because of the following reasons mentioned in the eassy.
firstly, every have a right to have a dream and follow it, one cannot stop any other person not to have a dream. for example most of the children always dreams to become an astronaut when they grown up and among that children there are also famous astronaut Neil Armstrong, Sunita Williams. if they have also started thinking that is not possible to become an astronaut as few people gets an opportunity for that, then for sure we will not be having Neil Armstrong who stepped on the moon first time and Sunita Williams first indian women to step on the moon. this is not the only example there are lots of other examples where person have achieved his ambitious dream and made the nation proud. Taking them as examples one must set there ambitious goal and should follow it.
secondly, following our dream job gives a self satisfaction and meaning to life. when someone achieve its dreams which he thought of gives a lots of pleasure to that person. which cannot be achieved by following the realistic goals as they forced to do it due to the external force that the society is putting on him. for example considering the case of MS Dhoni captain of indian cricket team he belongs to a poor family. society and his parent also forced him to do government and leave cricket as it does not any future scope as it very hard to get a place in a indian cricket team. if he also have think of the same then our county will not be having a such a great cricketer in an indian team.
there are person that exists on this world how are following there ambitious dreams, living that life which they have thought of, then why we could not be also one of them following our dreams and achieving it
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50531914894 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19588583735 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470744680851 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6005838213 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8571428571 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.5376344086 488% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294598391003 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987865452403 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720977971473 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187867281749 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555306389131 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 86.8835125448 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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