Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street while others think that it is the right thing to do Which point of view do you think is correct and why

There are many things we can do for charity, such as donate money for endangered animals, volunteer to take care of old people, and to advocate for protecting the environment. Of course, we can start tiny little things in our life. Some people suggest that it is generous to give money to beggars on the street. But I do quite agree with this behavior because it will not only destroy the specific people but also bring potential risk in the future for society.

First, I believe giving money to beggars on the street nearly takes away the man's future life. A man who can get money in such an easy way may lose the ability to carry on to live independently. It's pretty much like women in the porn industry who earn a great amount of money without much effort, they probably will refuse to work hard to earn the money they deserve and simply earn from people's sympathy.

Second, let us assume that all people willing to give these beggars one dollar or two, I believe they would get a large amount of money which will build a harmful model for young people. young people who get to know such a way to get money probably will regard this behavior as a nice job in the future, and eventually, this will cause economical crises because of lack of labor force.

Besides, once giving money to beggars we encourage people to gain without effort. many people will quit their job such as waitress, nurse, or cleaner to get into this "industry". The government will lose large sources of tax and under heavy welfare burden because people who are under retirement age refusing to work. Meanwhile, compared to giving money directly to beggars, it's more reasonable and less detrimental to offer them a temporary job such as mowing the lawn, cleaning the dishes or simply ignoring them.

As I stated above, we do appreciate the sympathy and the generosity of people, but it's essential for us to do the right thing for the ground good of society. And transforming from giving money to paying money to people can demolish the wall of discrimination and contribute a lot for the whole country in the future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, of course, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67024128686 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51946828932 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530831099196 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4078046967 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.133333333 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8666666667 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287730759647 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115827722652 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889937660206 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178147418468 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733603860346 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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