Nowadays, young people use most of their time after school and on the day of no school to play video games. Some people believe that these games inspire them efficient benefits for young people. However, almost all of people including their parents want them to stop playing video games because these games distract them and are waste of time. I believe that young students cannot receive good benefits from video games. There are three reasons for supporting my opinion.
First, the sight of young students is gradually down to worse by video games. When people have an opportunity to play any games, they have to keep focusing on-screen of devices. Then, they come up with ideas that their eyes are so exhausted and need glasses. Therefore, their parents have to pay money to them to buy glasses or eye contacts even their school tuition and game devices are so expensive.
Second, video game removes young people form their time to play with their friends outside. Technology completely changes by comparing it with the past, so they are able to play with their friends in video games. However, opportunities to play outside now is lower than in the past. Children can learn tolerance and communication from playing outside. For example, they slip down to the ground and scare and blood are making by their face. From this experience, they will be more careful about the ground, not more blood.
Third, young students use their free time as a waste of time when they play video games. Instead of games, they are able to concentrate on their studies such as newspapers, various materials of books, and homework. What they use their free time as flexibility decides their future university and jobs. For instance, English is already spreading to all the worlds, so what people can speak it is recognized as normal. Thus, people who have their mother tongue as English can acquire a second language in their free time. After that, their future will be more worldwide than people who play video games.
In conclusion, I think that young students should not spend their time playing video games. There are three reasons to imply my opinion. First, video games make young students’ eyes worse. Second, young students who play video games do not have opportunities to play outside with friends. Third, it is a waste of time for young students to play video games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92326732673 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29860153416 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457920792079 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.575220207 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.5 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5384615385 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193474968178 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666806848725 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564643856891 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12467287793 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579301199404 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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