The first major target of students after admission to university is, finding the best dormitory with welfare facilities and match to their budget too. Also some student is more wealthy than other and decide living in independently apartment, both of them have advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, living in an apartment with security in a good place of city, is more safety and more relaxing than dormitory.
First, some students choose living in dormitory, because it’s a cheaper choice and maybe in positive sight, they'll find new friends. I remember in my hometown, I was not working and my father paid me money every week. I have to tolerated that situations. My big problem was, we were 5 daughters in one place, although, we always have an argument about all small things, that was like a fighting. The worst memory that, I’ve ever had was, one of them drunk too much and she disclosed all of her sexology time with one of our professors and the other girl record her voice and share it in social media. The next day she went to university, without any knowledge to what happened last night, the manager of university fired both of them. She got shock and professor got angry and yelling at her and pushed her, immediately she got heart attack and me faced on her on that condition and I couldn’t revive her wit CPR, so, she died on my arms. After that I rented an apartment.
Second, renting or buying an apartment, is the best idea. but on the other hand, living alone in an apartment or skyscrapers alone, a little has own peril. I road in newspaper, lots of rape happened to alone girl in their house. The best idea is, Install a security camera around the house. For example, in India someone killed an art student in her bedroom 2 years ago.
In conclusion, students should pay attention to their safety and welfare to stay in a place that becomes their second house while of the period of studding.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
...cilities and match to their budget too. Also some student is more wealthy than other...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...afety and more relaxing than dormitory. First, some students choose living in do...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to live'.
Suggestion: to live
...itory. First, some students choose living in dormitory, because it's a cheap...
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Suggestion: they'll
...per choice and maybe in positive sight, theyll find new friends. I remember in my home...
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Suggestion: been
...e worst memory that, I've ever had was, one of them drunk too much and she dis...
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e her wit CPR, so, she died on my arms. After that I rented an apartment. Second, ...
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Suggestion: But
... buying an apartment, is the best idea. but on the other hand, living alone in an a...
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Suggestion:
... house while of the period of studding.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69590643275 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55460525375 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593567251462 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.037250432 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4705882353 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176413112782 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517943198008 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569058568816 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104566569939 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694925105398 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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