Although it may seem for a good family and community life that young adults live with with their families for a longer time and keep the bonds stronger but I think otherwise. In my opinion it is better for young adults to want independence from their parents as soon as possible. This is because of multiple reasons.
The first reason is that it is very important that young adults begin to face life on their own as soon as possible as it will make them more resposible for themselves and help in their development as matured human beings. For example, I realized this situation in my own life when I went to a boarding school away from my parents in grade 9. In my very first year of living on my own I learned so many things which I never did before. I learned to wash my clothes, make my bed, keep my belongings safe and in order and also I began to travel on my own and making new friends and building new support structure taught me independence early in life. When I finally moved out of school to attend a College and lived alone in my own apartment I found myself in a much better situation to cope with the change as compared to the rest of my class mates in College. Once I started living on my own then I began to make new friends again, signed my own lease for apartment, kept my apartment clean, cooked my own food, went to my classes and finished my homework as a responsible adult. I knew that this College degree will help me develop in to a Professional and an integral part of the society and make my life successful. So I was able to push harder and get good grades and finish my degree in time without needing extra vacations to go home more frequently as some students did that were feeling homesick. Thus, it helped me achieve my goal of being successful in life sooner than some of my classmates.
The second reason that I think that it is better for young adults to want their independence from their parents is that it will help them develop critical thinking ability because of the mental maturity they will gain in the process. Although it seems difficult emotionally that young adults live separate from their parents from early on but in the long run it helps them develop into a more rationale, logical and well understanding person that not only understands themselves but others too of both emotional and maturity level. When we are young in life we are emotional and more attached to our parents and family. We feel special for our family and want that the family feel special for us too. We care for our family members and in turn receive care from them. This is a very helpful process to help raise a child into a young adult. However, if this process continues even after reaching the young adulthood then our further attainment of emotional maturity may be affected. I was born and brought up in India in a culture where close family ties and living together is held very important in the functioning of the society. Although, it helps at a emotional level to stay close to your loved ones but now after attaining adulthood and living in US for half of my life, I realize my myself as more understanding of human nature and behavior than some of my friends that are still living with or close to their family. For example, marital relationships are still considered as a social relationship instead as a personal relationship. As a result, if a person is not happy in their marital life then they may feel bound to a person for the rest of their life even if they don't feel the love. This is because at an emotional level people still do not understand individuality and only focus on collectivism and so may not help everyone.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: with
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...g of the society. Although, it helps at a emotional level to stay close to your l...
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Suggestion: don't
...for the rest of their life even if they dont feel the love. This is because at an em...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, thus, well, for example, i think, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 103.0 43.0788530466 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2999.0 1977.66487455 152% => OK
No of words: 671.0 407.700716846 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4694485842 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08956458786 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52105985913 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4217585693 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 967.5 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8594457129 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.958333333 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9583333333 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282600780716 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981856377766 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113807793154 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278001122767 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15468696015 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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